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.[unabridged].

Living to hate, hating to live...
Why do you look at me that way?
The superficial always blocks what's [hanging by a thread] on the outside. You all say the same shit,
but you never want to get into it to see what I'm really about.
You stare at me with those blank eyes,
wondering when it's going to stop,
when all I really wanted
was for you to listen for [ME]
what's [TO] not obvious [SCREAM].

You're making me cry with every breath you take... because I know you know that I was just another mistake.
You better stop here, before you're in too deep...
you better stop now because you never really cared...
you better stop now because you don't really know what I'm all about...
you better stop now before I tear your eyes out.

You're the reason I'm hating to live,
you're the reason I've stopped trying to give,
you're the reason I'm giving it all up,
you're the reason I'm breaking my emotional cup.

You=Me
Now you can see what I'm trying to say,
now you have another reason to hate me everyday.

It's really not what anyone expects of me... so frankly, I never expect it of myself.

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[How}it...feels...-To+be
Written June 13th, 2006

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  • December 10, 2006
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    Wow...

    Well, I really liked this poem

    "You're making me cry with every breath you take... because I know you know that I was just another mistake." - The line that got me hooked!

    I loved the anaphora included throughout

    Very Well Done

    Best Wishes x

  • looslipsXOsinkships
    December 1, 2006

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    gorgeous

    this is one of my favourites... i totally relate to it

    "it's really not what anyone expects from me... so frankly, i never expect it from myself" < kickass line!

    "when all I really wanted
    was for you to listen for [ME]
    what's [TO] not obvious [SCREAM]."< i love love love how you wrote this :-D

    beautifulness hearts XO

  • rabidgnomes
    June 16, 2006
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    Thank you very much, it means a lot. This was written at a very depressing moment, but it expresses so much I needed it too. Thanks again.
    -Cara


  • She burns
    June 15, 2006
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    From the heart,Heartfelt and touching

    This is so otuching and heartfelt cara,
    It just goes inside of me,I feel the same way too,It's just so true and beautiful and everyone can relate to this,This is like a song with a powerful messeges
    Hope you feel better there cara