You look at me,
A passing glance,
Not to be acknowledged,
And still I do,
I look into your eyes,
I am warm,
I am safe,
And then it fades away,
To be lost,
Until we pass again.
Author notes
this was one i wrote for someone i loved and its personal for me.
Written June 13th, 2006
A contest entry
- 1st Contest!! by xox-lankan-xox.
550 points, ended December 17, 2006, 100 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sweet Chocolate Love by Periwinkle Blue.
300 points, ended December 19, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Not sure if you had chocolate in mind
when you wrote this, but what the heck, we all admit to loving chocolate and having a huge love affair with chocolate and not being able to live without it and feeling lost without it, so YES, I guess this could be a very metaphorical poem about chocolate!
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Wow! This was a very well written poem! Where;d you get the idea for this poem? Your a wonderful poet! Thanks so much for entering my contest and good luck! My favorite lines were "I look into your eyes,
I am warm,
I am safe,
And then it fades away,
To be lost,
Until we pass again." Thanks again and good luck! Take care.
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I think this is my favorite poem out of all of yours. Short and sweet. Personally I don't enjoy reading poems that go on for too long. I can barely express my love for this poem. It's hard to put into words. It's just fantastic. I imagined too teenagers walking by eachother, giving eachother nervous glances but quickly looking away and continuing on their day. Wonderful write.
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i love u too
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I love you babe.
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its about you...
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Amazing
Aw babe that's beautiful! If you don't mind me asking... who's it about? -
I think you have creatively and effectively captured the intended emotions...and those which you must feel. I think you did really well with this.
Keep up the good work.
LIZ -
It really describes the feeling of those brief moments. Good write.
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