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Secrets [Erotica]



 

Secret lover…
Let my warm breath
Bathe you in whispers…

 

Do you want me?

 

Do you yearn
For scratches of
Intense passion,
Etched,
Into your flesh,
As my tongue
Plays games with
Your glistening skin?

 

I’m waiting

 

I’m waiting
To share secret fantasies
Come…
Closer,
Let me spin you
Into my gossamer web,
And then devour you…

 


sarajane

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Option 3
Written June 13th, 2006

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  • The Drifter
    August 12, 2008
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    Secrets [Erotica]

    Very goo--flowed well

  • maheo
    August 21, 2006
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    what a sensual piece, I wonder about the gosamer web being a bit cliche, but it works in this so I guess it isnt so cliche after all.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 25, 2006
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    A very lovely, sensual piece indeed. Nice flow, and I enjoy the imagery here. Keep up the wonderful works, and all the best to you in this contest!

    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~

  • ColourBlind
    July 25, 2006
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    beautiful written! i love it


  • WolfHeart
    July 25, 2006
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    steamy

    Sensual - wow

    hugs WolfHeart


  • sarajaneUK
    July 25, 2006
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    Kind words! Thank you, much appreciated. sj


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    July 25, 2006
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    Most excellent! I loved everything about this one, my friend! It's hot, it's sexy, it's sultry, and it's....excellent! Thanks for sharing!


  • sarajaneUK
    July 13, 2006
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    Thank you for reading and commenting, much apprecited...smirks... this is just a quickie! sj


  • -theheartofme-
    July 13, 2006
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    said the spider to the fly? I liked this one too but not as much as your other one.


  • sarajaneUK
    June 30, 2006
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    lmao, are you any good?


  • Swtpoetryman
    June 29, 2006
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    DO YOU WANT ME?

    HELL, YES - YOU BET YOUR SWEET BIBBY, BABY! What man (or woman) wouldn't want a hot, sensual, and sweet poetess and lover as beautiful and as loving as you? And yes I'M WAITING

    for your reply!

    Peace & Love, Sweet Sara Jane!
    Earl.


  • sarajaneUK
    June 29, 2006
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    smirkles.

    Thank you endeavor for commenting, and the applause too. Much appreciated. sj


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 29, 2006
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    Very Good

    Very compelling, I dare not say more


  • sarajaneUK
    June 21, 2006
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    I'll just pop them back in the glass... Ty for reading and commenting. sj


  • David Lee Tiller
    June 21, 2006
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    More than enough to inspire and perspire the imagination...Now could you be so kind as to remove your fangs? Great write SJ. Peace


  • sarajaneUK
    June 19, 2006
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    Thank you KB for reading and commenting, hopefully there's just enough to inspire the imagination. Ty sj


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    June 19, 2006
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    This is an extremely sensual piece. You fill the mind of the reader with great imagery through your words. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • Image and Visions silver member
    June 19, 2006
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    sara, I agree with above in my reading of this piece, it is more sensual then erotica. however it is ahrd to tell apart as for me I believe it lies in the writer and in the telling of the piece being written. this is a nice write. Image and Visions

  • Azul Mariposa
    June 19, 2006
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    This was a very nice poem, soft and sensual.......I like erotica that leaves the reader to imagine a little for themselves......this was one of those type of poems.


  • Hellsfire02
    June 19, 2006
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    An interesting erotica, very sensual, Brilliant taste and it certainly got images running through my mind. I prefer this kind of erotica to hard core sex erotica. The flow and rythm is amazing. thankyou for featuring and sharing!! Keep writing!!

    ~marie lee
    xxx


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    This certainly gets the insides stirring. It was beautifully written with great taste. I prefer to read these than hard core erotica.


  • Tarja
    June 19, 2006
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    Very awsome! I completely loved it. It's not too long nor too short. And I'm a huge fan of erotic poetry. You did a wonderful job! Good luck in the contest.
    amanda


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Very well and tastefully written. Quite a seductive write. Very stimulating. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jeannie D Hunter


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    June 19, 2006
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    She says:

    "I don't write much erotica, I prefer sensuality to fire the imagination,"

    Isn't erotica a form of sensuality? How does one draw a clear distinction between the two?


  • lonely and free
    June 19, 2006
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    lovely sensual write..with a hint of need.. I love it


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    June 19, 2006
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    Phew!

  • painstricken
    June 19, 2006
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    You made me what you! This is a sexual and pleasuring peice! I really enjoyed it!

  • sarajaneUK
    June 17, 2006
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    Hello zimzam, thank you for reading and commenting, much appreciated. I'm pleased you enjoyed this one...I don't write much erotica, I prefer sensuality to fire the imagination, - some of my other sensual writes are longer! Ty sj


  • zimzam
    June 17, 2006
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    good write, but would like it more if your fantasies are discused more. keep writing pal


  • Nanette
    June 16, 2006
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    Your first stanza - my favourite!! Once again! I applaud you!


  • WelshDragon
    June 15, 2006
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    Fabulously strong imagery. Amazing write....Bizarrely enough, it's your punctuation that makes it so powerful......


  • greyhaime
    June 15, 2006
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    oh how seductive! you have a great write here.! I love a good tantilizing number.
    blessings-
    Krystal


  • shuggie
    June 15, 2006
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    Well Sj you I would say don't need much practice I think you've cornered things here,you can do a piece that the imagination takes over on so little meaning so much.Well done Sarajane.Your pal Shug

  • Uriah Hamilton
    June 14, 2006
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    good

    It works for me!!!!!


  • sarajaneUK
    June 14, 2006
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    Alex, you are just a pushover! MMMMWWWWWWAAAAAHHHHHH! Ty for commenting, and the applause. Jan


  • Floorboards
    June 14, 2006
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    ooh!i've came over all funny!..great write my friend,you've certainly got me going here!
    brilliant write,
    alex


  • sarajaneUK
    June 14, 2006
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    hahahaha, i'll take the roses of course...ummm, tell me, are you still thinking donuts?


  • captain splat
    June 14, 2006
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    Finger lickin good!

    concentrating very hard to write this review, my mind is all over the place after reading this little piece. I have a few questions: When? Where? How? I will send roses and applauses...

    tongue, skin... oh, must finish now.. gotta go... something came up!


  • sarajaneUK
    June 14, 2006
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    licks lips, and whispers...thank you leo sj


  • sarajaneUK
    June 14, 2006
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    Smirkles, ty dahlink, i think i need more practice though! sj


  • leo2
    June 13, 2006
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    Now what man in his right mind would be foolish enought to turn your offer down? I know I wouldn't. Whisper to me softly anytime my dear.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • dutch2lips gold member
    June 13, 2006
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    wow, this is indeed very sexy writing dear

  • sarajaneUK
    June 13, 2006
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    Ty for the comment and applause...er, won't it be a little chilly, over the frozen peas...am laffin here, pondering whether to post what i'm really thinking...nawwww, better not


  • individuality gold member
    June 13, 2006
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    i will get the bananas piled up and take you over them lol - or can i take you in the supermarket over the frozen peas
    spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...

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