A sore, fragile heart at stake,
Crying into the darkness of the abyss;
Abuse sent to me in a stamped envelope
Has robbed my eyes of all their bliss.
The levers and the cranks pumping my heart alive
Have begun to rust and break.
My heart has cried a river of tears
Because I know I've made a mistake.
Faster and faster, these brown eyes bleed,
Suffocating my every gasping breath.
The crimson tears cascading over my heart
Are nudging me towards my death.
Rapidly now, my tears tower high,
Causing my body to bleed and numb.
The rejection letter your sent sent to mine
Has left me to destroy my future to come.
This now has a title, thanks to Heather, notyourstar- .
Her poetry is the best in the world; read it, kiddos :]
Author notes
Thanks for the title, Heather! Much love to you, hunny.
Written June 13th, 2006
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My fu.cking GOD!!!!!! This fu.cking rocked!!!! Man, I loved this poem! My favorite lines are:
The levers and the cranks pumping my heart alive
Have begun to rust and break.
I love this!!!! You have great, no scratch that, AWESOME skills at writing!!! Keep it up! I mean it!
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WOW!!!! I haven't been on here in a while...and i haven't gotten to read your amazing poems. But WOW this one was amazing! I really liked it! You are soooo talented and you should NEVER give up writing. THat would be a mistake! Great great job
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I like it...good write...really.
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Amy this poem was beautiful! I f*cking loved this poem! Great job hun, you havent lost your talent at all! I'm so excited we graduate soon!! Hehe NFA here we come
Isabel
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Thanks Heather. I haven't been on here since February. Love ya much. We got some catching up to do. I'll be sure to read your poem. Bye hun!
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Hey hunnie,
I have to say I loved this poem.
But normally when I cannot think of titles
I usually pull a line out of the poem.
Like here I would use.
'Heart at Stake'
or
'Suffocating'
or
'Rust and Break'
or
'Gasping Breath'
That's normally what I do..
just a suggestion.
But, again I loved this immensely..
you really captured the essence of heartbreak.
And actually I just posted a poem about
the same subject.
You should check it out.
But, I love ya hun, and sorry I haven't
been on here more lately.
Keep writing though hun,
every new piece you make gets better and better.
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i know hwo you feel
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The Letter thata Broke my heart. I know it's corny but it kinda seems like that's what it almost is. I don't know maybe I'm crazys! Talk to you later
ME
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