. I love you .
Excitement . Maturity
Unstable security
x- I leave your kisses looming -x
For they catalyst my blooming
...I dance on your words all evening...
. But don't fail to fear you leaving .
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. I love you .
Emotions . Portray
The perfect Cliche
x- Your hands in complete control -x
The puppeteer to my soul
...I dance on your words at sunset...
. And pray you'll never forget .
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. I love you .
Conscious . Trance
Lustful Romance
x- Rainbows of colour, sparkles of feeling -x
Your kaleidoscope eyes are mine for stealing
...I dance on your words all night...
. But keep my fears locked up tight .
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Author notes
For Hairy Josh the Squash... hee hee...
Written June 13th, 2006
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A lovely tribute to someone. Loevely words and origional ideas put into it. Just lovely, well done. Thank you for entering this poem
Good luck in the contest
Well done
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I love your unique form to start- then the meanin of this is beautiful as well. Well done!! Thank you so much for entering and good luck!
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This is nice, but not what I am looking for.
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this was very amazing great job and good luck
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EXCELLENT
Excellent write ...Written so well.. I especiall LOVE your lines that say....Your hands in complete control -x
The puppeteer to my soul...
and Rainbows of colour, sparkles of feeling -x
Your kaleidoscope eyes are mine for stealing
What, excellent lines..I love these two lines..I love the whole poem.."Your talent shines" Pen on, and on
Excellent write..
Blessings always,
Betty -
That was really interesting, I like your formatting. Good job.
~TitledHeart -
i love this poem... i like the ryming. It fit perfectly and made the poem wonderful. great wording too
Keep writing
Amz -
wow, my names ashleigh too! thanks for you comment and kind words! -x-x-x-
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"x- Your hands in complete control -x
The puppeteer to my soul"
Wow, this contest is going to be a difficult one to judge. I'm getting so much AMAZING poetry, and yours is no exception. You've created beautiful images, flawless rhyhme, and best of all, you've created a poem out of genuine feeling.
Great job.
Ashleigh <3 -
wow! Honey this is amazing. It flows nicely and the rhyming is excellently chosen and very free, it doesn't sound forced at all. The strusture and layout of the poem is interesting too, it adds to the unique and most brilliantness of it The poem seems to mature and get more intense the most of it you read and has a great amount of emotion clasped in it's hand. It is a beautiful poem And also, it had a good, steady rhythm that made it easy for me to read and grab the flow of, which for me is a great thing! Hee hee Hairy Squash is a very lucky lad, my love
Love, Hugs and Kisses
Polly. The Most Excellent and Amazing
xxxxx
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