They tell me to write about
what I know,
but what about the things I dont?
I would love to write about the
pounding of waves
as they leave their mark
on the sand.
And the feel of your fingertips
down the path of my spine.
If I could, I would describe
the sunset as you wrapped
your arms around me.
Colors exploding,
a show on our own personal screen.
I want to experience the
anticipation
as you tease me with your gaze
and I wait,
patiently
for you to come to me.
But for now I'll just
stick to what I know.
I'm here and I feel
things that I've
never wanted to feel.
And it scares me.
I'm falling
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Written June 11th, 2006
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this is really lovely,
truly beautiful and touching.
you have done an amazing job on this write.
great job i really enjoyed your poem -
I enjoyed this as well. For me it seems that each time I feel something it never comes out right on paper. I try so hard to convey what I feel. This piece is quite good. I wish you luck in your fall into love. It is not all scary and bad. I promise!!! Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us, Trina.
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I really enjoyed the opening lines of this poem, and felt they were represented well in the closing of this poem as well. It comes full circle, which I rarely see these days. I truly believe that the middle of a poem doesn't matter if the opening and closing are incredibly strong, which they definitely are in this case (and that's not to say the middle isn't, lol). Very nice.
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I love the imagery you used throughout this write.
Great work and thanks for sharing it!
Allen0826 -
you are welcome it was worth the reading
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