The problem with you
Is that I'm so happy
And you may not have a clue
But feeling this way
Also hurts me too
When I am so damned close
I feel as if nothing has ever been as nice
But what I do fear the most
Always comes true
I sit back and wait
Knowing my fear is brewing
And in my mind, I create
A world in which I don't have to let go
I break down inside inside
When that hour comes
And sometimes I wish to hide
Never reaching the awaiting moment
In which, I am left behind
Author notes
I was listening to NPR (National Puplic Radio) where I hear a Poem called: \The Problem With Poetry\. This reminded me of how everything that you can enjoy, can hurt you as well.
Written June 10th, 2006
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hmmm, thought provoking on several aspects.... the problem with you is that I'm happy... I don't know how I would react to that... anyways this is a wonderful poem overall.
My only suggestion for you, something I find alot of poems are lacking, so I'm not just picking on you, would be to add some punctuation. Grammar is a really vital part of poetry because it allows the reader to understand each thought and each phrase as you intended to write it. Where as a poem lacking any punctuation could have the potential to lead the reader astray, therefore causing him to draw a completely different conclusion than you intended to give.
Just a suggestion though!
Best wishes fellow poet,
Shirley
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just what i need, when i was not looking
this speaks how i feel at this very moment. thank you for writing this.
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