Patriotism.
Is it dead?
Does any one care?
America.
Do you love it?
National Anthem.
Lump in my throat.
Tears in my eyes.
I care!
Do you?
Author notes
"Appreciate everything, or love nothing."
Written June 10th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- sweet & short prewrite paradise by neenz.
450 points, ended January 4, 2007, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let the best poet win! by Norman Crabtree.
675 points, ended January 23, 2007, 107 entries
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300 points, ended January 20, 2007, 17 entries
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300 points, ended February 20, 2007, 11 entries
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900 points, ended August 25, 2007, 97 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - lazy contest: pre-write party 2 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended August 23, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short pieces - Prewrites Allowed. Bring the good stuff! by Amunet Wolfbane.
1000 points, ended April 1, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I really like your author's notes. Great advice. The poem I do like as well. The only thing in my eyes is that it reads more like a poster than poetry.
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I'm Australian and love it.
I also love your poem -- your words are powerfully succinct.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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Dancing Red
Thank you so much for your comments and thank you for hosting this contest.
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You seem to say a lot within the short breath of this piece, yet, it still seems a tad short of really saying anything more than: "I am patriotic, are you?" - I mean, that's all it's saying, to me. It's not really saying anything else. And that's good, in itself, but, I feel for something of this accord, it could say more.
Just a thought.
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Nam
Thank you for your honest review. It is so hard to get them now days. It is appreciated.
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right to the point
i still get the lump too
thanks for entering and best of luck
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Thank you LadyUnique
I truley appreciate your comments. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and leaving your comments.
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thank you for entering my contest!
ive always found patriotism a funny game, i cannae comment on your country as im British not american, but ive always believed Patriotism to be quite counter productive in dealing with world problems.
i do want to say thank you for entering this poem though i really liked the form and structure and minimalist style to it. which is what i asked! you put across a valid point of view coherently and not brimming up with over nostaligic rubbish. -
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Thank you Norman Crabtree
I appreciate your honest comments about my poetry. They are greatly appreciated.
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We are fortunate to live here, never mind the naysayers. Thank you for the entry.
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Thanks neenz
Thank you for your comments. They are appreciated.
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Thank you so much for your comments I-Like-Rhymes. I am a veteran of 26 years in the military and I am sure that has had an influence on me when it comes to patriotism.
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I cannot agree with Doctor Samuel Johnson who wrote that Patriotism is the last refuge of scoundrels. Judging by your poem neither do you.
Clear feelings, well written.
Thanks for entering this piece in my competition.
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Thank you so much foor your comments DarkenedAuras. This is truely how I feel about this country.
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Wow this is short and to the point you say a lot in such few words...I love America the way it was in olden days...when towns would pitch in to help someone, laws weren't so strict, things were actually 99 cents, meat and gas didn't cost an arm and a leg, and most of the earth was still LAND not buildings, banks, restraunts, gas stasions, and plants and factories...
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Thank you so much for your comments Frodofan. I original wrote that poem for a contest called minimalistic poetry.
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I like the bluntness of this. It makes the reader feel interogated and reflect on themselves. Good job.
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Thank you so much for your comments Serenahind. They are greatly appreciated.
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I care about America. Those that don't can go back where they came from. I am all for people being true to their heritage but I can't stand people complaining about our country when they cam to our country.
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Thank you for your comments Natari Moon. Your kind words a greatly appreciated.
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A statement in nice short form and being English I won't get political.Plus I actually live in New Jersey so go figure.Thank you for entering and it definately qualifies as minimalistic.
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Thank you so much for the comments Marie-Lee. I am glad that you enjoyed reading my poem.
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A great write full of fantastic imagery in so few words! An emotion packed yet short piece. Thankyou for sharing and featuring!!! Keep writing!!!
~marie lee
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Thank you so much for your comments Image and Visions. I appreciate anyone who tries to do something for our armed services. Thank you.
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Polly, very nice and simple piece. I feel the same as you do, so many seemed to have lost the feeling how precious it is to be American. I am trying to organze a soldier support rally here, but going has been very tough and slow. I became involved in politics because I want to be proud of my country, my God and our soldiers.. good write Image and Visions
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem masterblaster and I echo your feelings on the state of our country today.
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Hi, many of us care for our country but get sick to the stomach when we see how it is changing ,seldom for the better I am sorry to say, we just hope people will stop and think a little more,all the best, Di
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Thank you so much for your comments Wolfheart. They mean a lot to me coming from you.
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Thank you so much for your kind words and comments dustookie2. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem.
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excellent
Makes me want to stand up and salute!! - I see I now stand no chance in that contest - LOL - very good work. Form is good, technicals down pat. I salute you, sir for your service to this wonderful country.
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said with feeling
You know it is nice to see this piece so many give so much and they are the heroes of this world. We all need to have faith in our countries this shows a real sense of pride in so few words Well Done. good luck in the contest. Glad i came in for a look.
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Thank you for your comments Bluepoetess. Your kind words are very much appreciated.
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i like it. very nice. short but has meaning and emotion. packs a lot in a few words. good job with writing this. good luck in the contest. enjoyed.
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Thank you so much for your comments LAPoe. Your kind words are appreciated and I am glad that you care. God bless America.
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Yes, I care, I only wish our Government cared half as much and
did half the damage...then again I could say that about most
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Thank you so much for your comments Schatzi Elfe. Your kind words are greatly appreciated.
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Sehr Gut !!!
Adorable and so very well expressed ~ in such a few well chosen words. I must say this is very well penned. Best wishes in the contest , I may have to try this style!
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