We lived a mile down the road from my grandfathers farm
My moms dad always picked on me, he always kept me from harm
When I got my drivers license he would call me to take him to town
I would pick him up, he would tell stories to me his little clown
He would pay his bills then stop and have two beers
Talk with his buddies, on the ride home he was always in good cheer
A bottle of boone's farm apple wine he bought every time
He always told me a little drink now and then is not a crime
One day he called, wanted a ride
He said come in he would be inside
My one uncle still lived at home, he had some things wrong
When he was young he had polio, his hips were no longer strong
He walked with a bad limp that it had left him
It prayed on his mind, he saw his future very dim
This morning I stopped, walked to the porch, opened the door
I stepped into a deer rifle rammed in my face ready to put me on the floor
My uncle's eyes were crazy and wild behind the gun
I knew I did not have time to run
The hammer was cocked, his finger tight on the trigger
His eyes so wild, to me they could not get any bigger
Grandfather was in the other room yelling for him to put it down
He just stood there flashing me a terrible frown
After a tense couple of minutes he lowered it from my face
My heart was pounding at a dangerous pace
I got my grandfather out of the house that day
He told me my uncle as of late had been acting this way
The family finally got him help. he was put away
He never got better, that is the way he would always stay
I thought that I would die that day
I asked God to please take my soul, caress it to him, withl him it will stay
This is another true one from which I learned when I was young and carefree
Now with these memories I am a different me
Author notes
This is another true story, that day I was only seventeen and had truly looked at death in the face, I walked away that day, I knew then God had a plan for me
Written June 10th, 2006 I chose options #4, I hope you like reading my story! It was written a long time ago and does not follow a certain way of writing but it is a true story.
A contest entry
- Some off the wall options by takemypainaway.
450 points, ended March 3, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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!!!!! That's so sad, i'm so glad i still have you, if i didn't, i have no idea what i would end up doing.
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HEY THERE SWEET DAUGHTER!
This was a terrifying day for me, I truly felt I was seeing my last few seconds on this earth. He did not pull the trigger that day but he still kept much anger and disillusion in him.
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this, so sad, and yet very intriguing.
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HELLO FREEFALL HEART
Thank you ever so much for reading this little story of mine. I actually had this happen to me and my uncle did come ever so close to pulling the trigger that day. 
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ahhh... how scary
you know i read this when it was first entered and i
have remembered the the imagry this whole time
you must have done something write
thank you for entering the contest...
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HELLO KAT
Thank you so very much for reading this and I know it may not be in good form or the lines equal or reading smoothly but I needed to let this story come out in hopes that others who have had similar experiences will know they are not alone and feel that others do understand and can associate with them.
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Hmmm...
I'm seeing this as more of a story. I'm not seeing this as a poem. At all. This has nothing poetry like in it. It rhymes, but hey! So did Dr. Suess. Free writing still needs form and I suggest you take up story writing instead. I think that would better suit you and people might respect you a little more for it. I'm sure you can write poems too, it's just that this isn't one.
But let's say I was commenting on this as a story. In that case, I love it! I thought the immagery was spectacular! You could even take this idea and run with it and turn it into a small book. Really. an amazing story. -
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HELLO KIMMYKAT
Thanks ever so much for reading and yes it is a true experience of mine so therefore that would make it more a story. How else would one write of an experience? I could leave out words and have it not make any sense at all but to me poetry is feelings, emotions, not just writing in a certain form. To others this may not be so. Now this may sound very mean and cruel but when one tears apart something that was very terrifying to someone ..... Well I won't go there. Let's just say thanks for reading.
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Well that could almost ruin your entire day!!! Loved the write and the images you portrayed.
Blessings,
Azlyn
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DEAR AZLYN
Thank you so much for reading my story from so long ago.
This really did happen to me, I truly thought I was going to die that day.
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Thanks so much, I now know how one feels when they are threatened by violence. I have a much better understanding of situations that are life threatening.
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We all love you and are glad you are still with us.
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Thanks so very much for reading this my sweet friend, your words touch me very deeply.
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Thanks so much for reading Sue, this was a truly terrifying day for me. It though prepared me for later.
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This was very interesting and I enjoyed the glimpse into your inner workings. It was sad to see the pain your uncle obviously let pray on his sanity. I'm glad that you lived through it because you are now a light brightening the days for me and many others. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks so very much for reading this Tammy, this was a terrifying day for me.
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wow what a day that must have been for you. glad god was watchin over you. thanks for sharing
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I thank you so very much for taking the time to read this, this was a terrible day for me and I knew that I was spared for a reason.
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My dear Melodies. I know I was spared that day for a reason, my mother came down with the same mental illness that my uncle had, and as my father had started to show symptoms of his disease at the same time as my mother developed this it was a truly trying and difficult teen years for me. I appreciate your taking the time to read another piece of my heart.
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SHOCKING
Puppydog!! Thank God you are still here on earth!!! My Goodness, this write SHOCKED me...I'm stunned.
The final words are brilliant: I am a different me....how very profound.
Oh my, I'll have to IM you on this one.
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Oh, Puppydog, how frightful that was! Like from a scary TV show! I can't get over how close you came to leaving the Earth at an early age and your uncle going to prison. The national statistic for mental illness is one family out of three has mental illness!
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Thanks so very much for reading my story, I guess I was spared for a reason that day.
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truely inspirational. i love that your faith has helped you to carry on.
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Thanks again for reading, this was a truly traumatic experience for me, I began to understand that sickness and also that there must be a higher power that steps in from time to time to form our lives.
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Wonderfully written. Life is a learning experience everyday. It's amazing the things we survive that make such an impact on our lives. Things that form our future. God does take care of us, he did have a plan for your life.
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Thanks for reading my friend, this memory is a very trying one for me but taught me so much.
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Thanks so much for reading my dear friend, this is a very lasting memory for me, it definitely made a difference in my life.
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Thanks so much for reading, this was a true and lasting memory for me .
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Thanks ever so much sis, I thought a lot about posting this and the one before it but they are my memories of things that have made a difference in my life.
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God has his plans for you Kevin,no one can take that away, the Angels are there guiding our way..keep up this great writes is one of them my friend..
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GREAT!!!
wow if you went through this it's really great and now long after semms to have lost some of it's edge but its still really great. good job and thank for sharing! --kathy -
wow...I'm really glad that God saved you that day or we couldn't find a wonderful friend like you here.
Wish you wonderful days.
Shahrzad
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wow this was a very intense write. Sometimes we get caught up in situations that are very scary at the time and when you look back upon them, you think about how if that didn't happen, how would you be different. And if you never had this memory, I would have to go look for another terrifc poem to applause and comment on
*Jordan*
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Thanks for reading, this experience will always remain in my mind and heart to help me in dealing with things thata happen to me today.
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Wow, this was such a sad piece and probably a very frightening experience Nice rhyme Keep writing, it was very powerful piece
Thanks for your comment
Best wishes
Pozo
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Once again what happened years ago remains in my mind and heart and helps me today as I face each new challenge. Thanks for taking the time to read Linda, these experiences were very important in my life.
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I was only seventeen at the time, I was also dealing with my own parents at that time, I was very shocked when I walked in on this, staring into the barrel of a cocked and loaded rifle was a very humbling experience. I thought you might like to read another experience of mine. Thanks for taking the time to read.
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Kevin,
Is it that God has another plan? Or is it simply an angel has been our guardian? Which ever the case maybe, the point is we survived it, kept it in our memory bank and used it as a tool in our future. Having been in a similar circumstance I personally use it as my red flag. That little something that triggers a memory when something of the present, a danger is forboding. I use it as strength and as guide. Your experience is halting. No one in their young lives or old should have to experience such a thing.. But I do believe it's what we do with that experience that makes the difference.
It's sad that your Uncle was even in this state. Thank goodness your grandfather was there, for he seems to be the one person your uncle listened too. Which ever the reason, which ever the plan. Everything you lived through brought you to where you are today.
~Michelle~
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Walking in on that was a huge shock and what happened that day has stayed with me forever.
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Sweetie, thank you for always sharing a part of your heart and soul; it makes for letting your reader know who you are...the wonderful, caring person you are
Thank you for sharing you! God bless you, hon!
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You are such a dear, yes at times they can be very hard to remember but other times one has to just tell someone of the things that havd made a difference in their lives and I have had this feeling of wanting to let these memories out. It is so nice to meet you also, I have read your poems from time to time and have found your words and thoughts so helpful to me.
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ok so... Hi Kevin... is nice to meetcha! I'm Melissa! shakes hand
I do thank you for sharing a little of yourself here... I'm sure it's hard at times to share deep or hurtful experiences... I know it has been for me... but just think... you might help others through what you have experienced... and that is a great thing indeed!
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Thank you from the bottom of my heart Melissa, this is yet another experience that will remain forever with me. I am so sorry that I have not introduced myself before this, my name is Kevin.
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Dear Lori, Thank you from the bottom of my heart for stopping by to read, this experienced is one that will forever be with me. I was not sure if I should post this or the one before it as both are ones that some may not understand or know how to react to them. So your very touching words reach in my heart and touch it so much.
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Yes, Puppydog, God has a plan... for YOU... you were spared that day... for there was a reason...
This is such a touching write Puppy... you really went through some tough times as a kid eh? I'm so very sorry... truly I am... but you know... your experiences have made you who you are today... you seem to be a very caring person. I am glad to be able to read your wonderful, touching stuff...
God bless you Puppydog! By the way... I DO love your AP name... I LOVE puppies!!!! BUT... what is your real name?
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Incredible
OMG, this is an incredible piece!! You have a captivating style and knack for expressing your emotions in a way that the reader feels they are standing right beside you. I'm so sorry for you that you ever had to live through such a horrific experience. I can't imagine how you cope with it but I do know from suffering years of abuse that these kinds of experiences change us inside. I hope you've been able to deal with it in a positive way. You have a tremendous talent for writing out your feelings and your trials and tribulations!! You are truly gifted!! My AP sis Helen Melon guided me to your page and I'm so glad she did. I'm adding you to my faves. I look forward to reading through more of your work soon. DON'T EVER STOP WRITING!! Wishing you much love and happiness in your future.
~*Lori*~
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I am touched by your words, I was not sure if I should post this or not and the one before it, both are truly vivid and terrible experiences but sometimes I feel I must tell someone of these memories. Thanks so very much for reading.
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Thanks for reading this, I was not sure if I should post this and the one before it. Both are some truly vivid experiences in my life, I was indeed watched over by a higher power that day.
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Holy shit this is incredible, you had my heart racing just reading it, my eye's bulging at the terror you write I shake my head in disbelief I have had a similar situation with an ex boyfriend who out of shear stupidity done something like this for reasons I wouldn't like to get into but mate this is an excellent write. very well done.
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How terrifing! I am sure it changed you a lot. Very well written. I felt I was right there witnessing the whole thing. So sorry for your uncle. SO glad you and your Grandfather got out. Thank you for sharing.
Jeannie D Hunter
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