There is
a wondrous mystery
and all the world.. is searching
forever for this gift
it comes to us
sometimes by surprise
unseen... unknown
and we never know
nor could we contrive
to make it so
it is love.. and we have.. no control
so we cling desperately
to our fate
and pray... for a better day
and every dream
with all we conceive... in our mind
is subject to this destiny
completely
wishing... waiting
dreaming.. for our saint to appear
to hear their words... their voice
to see their face
love comes to us
like the sweetness of a child
born in the myth of innocence
the touch of a kiss
a soft caress
once upon us
there is no escape
except to give in
to surrender
precious... perilous
powered within... by sins
we begin in faith
yet the dream
of every man
and the blessing
of every women
is true love
it is life... all of it
captured and made new again
by a name
so we give our selves.. completely
and open.. every door to our heart
and hope we have chosen our champion well
as we fall under
as we Surrender
again and again
LeeL
Author notes
The style is my style, Freeverse, forever free
This is a personel favorite that I would like read.
I just like the thought of it
Written June 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- inspiration often enters through the window of irrelevance... by Skye Ze.
400 points, ended July 8, 2006, 28 entries
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Comments
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wow this is so very true
we are just like this
and we do hope that its forever
and you wrote this poem just the way life realy is
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Ruth
Save your applause for others
I appreate the comment alone
Yes, this is the teather we all hold on to
In love we have no choise
but to stay away and safe
or Surrender
Rick
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For many giving into love seems near impossible for fear of losing themselves. Personally I believe losing yourself is part of love. It is one of the things that makes it that much more wonderful to join in fully and accept as part of us and our lives. You can lose yourself in love without truly losing 'yourself' but honestly I believe love is too grand a gift to deny such a leap of faith or rather a fall to surrender.
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Tender
Thank you for reading me
Sorry I did not see your comment
I believe every word you wrote to me
I have fear of love, yet I seek it daily
Rick
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brutal...beautifully brutal
so many ways to read between the lines as it affects
all our life decisions, I like the purple too...because
so many of us walk around with bruised hearts.
I must ADD air to my own writings, you are a pro. at it,
we stroll with you, ponder and allow us to bring you
near with your carefully touched....words.
Thankyou for the time it took to write this!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Hi Kathleen
Thank you for your thoughtfull comment
In the church I was raised in, purple is a solum color
Love can be a joy, or a tramatic experance
and we move foward in great faith, wishing and not knowing
Rick
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Thank you for sharing this inspirational write on love. It is hard to give onesself completely and totally over to something that is unsure and uncertain. Yet you have written of the romance and desire and devotion so eloquently. Loved it.
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de llanto
I know well the struggles of this most splendid gift
it is for this reason, that I am able to make the words
The opening thoughts site the delima, the closing words give hope.
In the middle, I offer the dream, our reward to risk again
Thank you for caring for my words
Rick
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I think this is such a precious write, it is hard sometimes to give ourselves up to love and all the uncertainties it holds.... you have written in splendour of every reason why we should trust our hearts and dive in head first..... inspirational
Karen
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Hi karen
Thank you for believing my reasons
If we hold back, in any form, I believe they never knew us
Thank you for saying Inspirational
rick -
You saw the thoughts of my words well
Our chance is in the choosing, then we fly in faith
If we hold back, we loose some of the care we seek
As you said, dive in
Rick
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I like this poem, i can see why you mentioned it to me. I understand what's written here, I only wish that i where able to feel it better. Sorry for the long reply time.
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Chaotika
Thank you for reading me
The time doesn`t matter, I just wanted you to see
Open your mind and it may become more in you
Rick
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Your words are so soft and pure.
so we give our selves.. completely
and open.. every door to our heart
and hope we have chosen our champion well
moon2u
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Moon2u
I realy care for these words
I appreate you liking them as well
Rick
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I was once told that adults should live thier life more like children, carefree, open heart and most of all with faith. Love will take care of itself naturally. Great Poem
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Hi Girl
Sorry I missed you comment
I always try to answer all comments
I think you are right in what you said
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Say your name Please
Great quote
adults should live thier life more like children, carefree, open heart and most of all with faith
I believe this as well
I thank you
Rick
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love comes to us
like the sweetness of a child. Nice way of saying it.
Perhaps this is why somebody once was quoted to have said, ''You must become as a little child to enter into the Kingdom of Heaven.''
Smile,
Judy
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Hi Judy
I thank you for caring for my words
I believe in your quote as true, Love is the same
I speak deeply of the risk in this
Rick
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good reall
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Optimists
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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so beautiful, I loved this one its touched me love is a beautiful gift and it really does come to us like a child born in the myth of innocense I wish I had your talent for writttin
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Crystal
Thank you for your carefull reading
Thank you for saying beautiful
Rick
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I love the idea in this, of surrendering to love. Not embracing it, but totally giving ourselves to it. Its a scary prospect, but one that is always worth making, no matter how much we get hurt.
Such a finality to this, but such a lot of beauty.
Excellent.
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Pink Roses
I offer the prospects and the possabilities of found love
Then we act upon this, sometimes holding back, sometimes giving all we are. I think we should guard ourselves and choose well, and if we have found a great man or woman, we should let go of our selves and give all, to have it all just ONCE. Thank you for reading me, just my thoughts. Rick
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Love is a precious gift...one we must cherish above all else. My deepest desire is that love take hold of each and every heart in this world, becoming the master of it. That we all see the difference that this one simple word can make. It is a desire of great magnitude I know, yet I am but a poet...I am bound to dream. I have so enjoyed this night and reading and commenting on your poems. It has been a delite! Will cetainly see you later dear Poet!
Love and Peace,
Azlyn
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Hi Suzie
Just reading your kind comment again
Rick -
Azlyn
Your words are so gifted.
As poets, we must dream beyound what we know and touch.
In my living and sleeping dreams, I can go amoung the most distant Galexy and see the three trillion mirecules God left amoung us. I can love anyone, or see my brother walk.
I wish like you, the world were like my dreams
Thank you for caring for my words, Rick
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Beautiful poem about love
Thanks for your comment
Pozo
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Interesting... conversation! Was going to say... there's no sin in love. There is innocence. Funnily enough I wrote one the other day which ended 'give us our innocence back'. The pagans had it. But then I read this refreshing, honest exchange. This 'disparity between expectation and reality'. Almost right. No expectations.... for me, is best. Just a meeting of what is. and an acceptance. A struggle, sometimes, but never a disappointment. Well, almost never, to be honest. Expect of others as much as you can give. Nothing more. We 'are all faulty, the earth's creatures'. We are all beautiful, and we are all ugly. In some way, in some times. There is beauty which never fades, never dies. That is love, I guess. When love is in operation that is. There is a beauty within which is forever lovable, and forever able to love. The capacity to love fades but love itself goes on, with or without our capacity to feel it. Or express it. Some never do. They just wait for it to happen to them. Wait for life to happen to them. Sorry for the interruption, but thanks for the stimulation!
PS Yes, there is a surrender in love. Captive - made captive - love forces itself on us. It's joy when recprocated - still, a lonely joy to feel, when it's not. -
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Aurore
Thank you for reading this writing
Thank you for reading my exchange in comments as well
I think your conclusions will serve you well
Please read me again, Rick
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I did cut my hair. I shaved off my beard. The world at large though still kind of sucked. Corporate greed, berating assholes. It's horrible. Have you been out there lately?
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Neurosine
I live and work in it
Corporations are like a spoiled child, that wants everything for them self, and care nothing for the server. If you can devise a way to become the company, you may find yourself much happer.
Then you control, you set the trend, and create the priorities. My best advice for you
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Thanks. I'm an IT systems Manager. Been a network engineer, a senior tech and such. My problems always arise when the companies I work for cease to be a service to the community. So now I work in education. And I'm happy contributing to a eugenic cause. And we still make money, but we're an ethical and considerate organization. I'm still deeply unhappy with the world as a whole. Maybe it's not just me man. Though I appreciate any positive suggestions.
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Neurosine
I think the source of most disinchantment, weather a women or a hudge corporation, is in the disparity between expectation and reality. I wish the world was better, I wish all women remained beautifull forever.
Truth is, this is not a reasnable beliefe.
I would never permote an oughtright comp-ermise of our dreams or beliefs. We do well as a gender and a species, if we can match ourselves as close as possable, to the world and lives we find around us.
We need, a practical expectation, to end the greif we can not control.
I wish you well
Rick
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Amazing Words of Love
That shows just how pure and sweet it can be. It reminds me of a rose garden blooming. They come each year, but sometimes they don't return. Love can be fickle the same way. Then again it can just keep returning year after year.......excellent Love poem..magnificent writing........novy
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Novy
I realy like your analige
I think it is very true
We wish we could control love
We just give and hope for the best
It is all that we can do, we are too human
Thank you for saying Magnificent
Rick
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A poem about love. How original. Umn right. Having another one of those incredibly cynical nights. I'm so sick of reading superfluous fluff. Sorry. Or at least, I think I should apologize for my complete lack of compassion.
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Neurosine
What would you expect on a poetry site
Perhaps this is a bad day for you to comment on anything
I would recomend you cut your hair, shave off your beard, and you might feel less sick about yourself, and the world at large...lol
Sorry for my complete lack of compassion
Rick
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I am still waiting
I have not yet experienced such things. Sometimes I feel as if I will wait endlessly. I mean guys like you don't come along everyday you know.
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Angel
I thank you for reading my words
Sometimes we need to waite. Deep compelling love is rare
We are better to lie in an empty bed, than live each day in regret
Rick
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This is certianly not an onion, but the aromatic sigh of a rose blossoming within the heart.
Just beautiful.
Marianne
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Marianne
Your comment is right on
A dream to find precious love
Thank you for saying beautifull
Rick
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wow
"love comes to us
like the sweetness of a child
born in the myth of innocence"
the true words, and expressions of a poet. this is amazing, wow. It flows so sweetly and even though it is darker in areas it still holds the light of love within its words. wonderful job on this.
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Paulla
Thank you so much for reading
I like thoes words as well
It is all true
I thank you
Rick
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Very pretty and soothing... though I DO believe we can control love... I believe it's a choice that one makes... love can also be beaten down until it dies as well...
Anyway... this is serene... well written and oh so beautiful. You make love sound like a very nice feeling/emotion! I usually don't write/read love poems at all... but I am actually glad that I read this one!
Well done!
~Melissa
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Molassis
Thank you for reading and making this the exception in love
Rick
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I really don't mind being at the bottom of all of your comments because it feels rather nice to be under soooooo many beautiful words
My dear Poet...you have won me over 
Laney
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VERY BEAUTIFUL
Yes I read this a while ago. I just reread it and loved it just as much the second time. So soft and beautiful are your words. Thank you for all the smiles. Becca.
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I must have missed your comment
to surrender is to give
freely and wholly and
your poem portrays
this beautifully
from your heart
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Becca, I think your comment covered all that can happen in love.
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Lovely Poem
Thank you Rick for sending me to this beautiful poem you have written with such warmth. Yes love is many things to many people. Sometimes it hurts and sometimes it is amazing. Sometimes it comes and sometimes it goes. But who would ever want to live without it. Not I. Thank you for a pleasant read when I could not sleep. Becca
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this poem is magical.
it gave me the feeling
of the first time one
realizes they are in love.
your words captured this
rare essence.
to surrender is to give
freely and wholly and
your poem portrays
this beautifully
from your heart
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Victoria, Glad you Loved it, Rick
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Thank you so much for the link to yet a nother wonderful write. I enjoyed t his piece and your right i did love it. Again your great. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent, Love ya.
Victoria -
Thank you for your thoughts on my writing. Very often I will begin, almost philosophical and move to phyiscal. So you are very correct. Most readers will see the writing as a complest work in words. You are cleaver to see into the poem. I hold the emotion and press the words to paper, is my best explanation.
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You know Rick, I think you have two poems here. Your first 11 lines stands beautifully enough alone as one poem. This first part takes on a direction more toward the spiritual love as opposed to conjugal love. The latter of your poem tends more toward the natural love /conjugal and imparts a more romantic connection between a man and women.
I like the tightness of this piece and it does ring with your signature voice of insatiable romance.
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Rick this is absolutely beautiful. How very right you are,your words here speak volumes of truth in this image filled piece. Thank you for sharing another wonderful jewel from your storehouse of feelings...mal
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Just a comment for you, and perhaps it will give insite. This was written for a girl at 1:00 am, as we talk on an Instant Messenger. I ask her to stop and just read, and typed the words just as you see them, poring out my love to her from my feelings. Later we met, and I loved her more, but we faught like children and finally broke away. After I met her, I wrote "I Will" a confession of commitment in love.
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you have a wonderful talent for such beautiful artistry in your poetry, in your words and the way you submit them. this is wonderful. love is definitely your skill.
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This is fantastic and so true -
Thank you for your kind words, Rick
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love comes to us
like the sweetness of a child
born in the myth of innocence
the touch of a kiss
pure bliss
a soft caress
once upon us
there is no escape
except to give in
to surrender
Now this is a beauty of a poem. You have described love and its emotions so well in the above stanza..I adore this write very much. Once again beautifully penned.
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this poem describes love wonderfully. each word is short and precise. great write.
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Another beautiful write Rick, you have some expertly penned verses in there. Always a joy to read your work.
'love comes to us
like the sweetness of a child
born in the myth of innocence' Wonderful You provide a refreshingly pure and meaningful outlook on love. Kudos.
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thank you so much for the poem. I love this one alot great job.
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Thank you for commenting. It is more about the risk and blessings of falling in love and the choises we make therein.
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Hi reading between the lines it sounds like an illicit affair, I could be wrong but it gave me that feeling, as if you wan't to convince someone, good poem, all the best, Di
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Super write
Such a super write, Rick. I love it when I log on and see another one of your poems. Bob -
Thank you for your kind words, I must have missed your comment.
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Rick, this is very beautiful. Love the lines:
"the touch of a kiss
pure bliss
a soft caress
once upon us
there is no escape
except to give in
to surrender "
Very soft and lovely, my friend...
Lynda
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This is quite beautiful, I enjoyed reading it. You portrayed a very nice emotion using your word choice. The thing I liked most about it was that you made the reader read it how you wanted it to be read, using line spacing, etc. Very nice job.
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I can certainly see why this would be one of your favorites. Have you ever heard "the measure of our love is the measure of our sacrifice"? This came to mind as I was reading this. When you meet that soul mate, you give up all the "closed doors" and allow them to enter in-sacrificing your own privacy to share it with that special one. Over and over again, as you say.
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Very nicely and wonderfully written, my friend!
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I made the change after reading it five times...lol It sounded ok eather way, but I will trust you english over mine, TY Dear
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Wow, what a lovely curtique. Thank you for your many kind words, and espacally, for seeing so far into my words. Rick
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An excellent entry...
Gosh Rick this write is extremely expressive and visually pleasing, like a sensual journey...again another one of your poems that fills me with pleasant thoughts...
Love can make you happy when you're sad, better when you're in pain and make brighten what was once dark, beautiful...
It says so much to me anyway, that even in the darkest, most painful hours, love can make everything appear a bit brighter...just because that special someone is near...there is harmony in your soul and in your heart...a truly lovely piece and deserves my applause...
~Lilac~
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Thank you for reading and I fixed the spelling again..lol
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a myth of innocence! I love the changes you have made to this. It does flow well when read slower. I usually read pieces out loud anyway. Never stop spreading your love through your writes Rick. This is exquisite! Just a note: surprise.
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I struggled with the flow all along untill I inserted the "pauses..." and changed the line spacing.
The whole poem only works if it is read slowely giving time to each verse as written seperatly. When I read it aloude, my self, it seems to work. But I have pratice...lol
TY for your comments, Rick -
As always, thank you for your fine curtique. I made the changes and I did mean to say champion. I think I am correct on "Chose" in my meaning. Thank you again for reading my work, Rick
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I love the sentiment of this, but its not one of my favourites of yours - it just feels a bit stilted - given that it is about love, i wanted it to have a better flow.
but i love the idea of love taking over - it happens every time.
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