Where Sand Meets Sky
In mournful tune that shines the sand
where once we walked both hand in hand
eyes water as I say goodbye,
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
As waves roll in to suds the shore
your lilting laugh is heard no more.
The sea breathes out its subtle sigh
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
Oh how I miss your perfect face
that smiled with joy and beauty's grace,
now blended with the tears I cry
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
With wishes yet for you with me
my heart knows I must set you free;
release my anguished questions why
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
And somewhere midst the setting sun
heart feels your spirit soar as one
with heaven's angels as you fly
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
Copyright © 2006
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
Author notes
Pamela A Lamppa
March 26 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Favorites Only Please! Thank You! by poetryality.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 46 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Right now I'm having real trouble concentrating (need to do something about that) but this poem totally captured me from the beginning. It is a beautiful form and you executed it wonderfully. The emotions in this overwhelmed me... it built up the sadness till I thought I was about to cry, but with the ending... I feel that things are as they are meant to be.
You are amazing; hope you don't mind if I add you as a favourite.
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Kyle
Thank you. Of all the poetry you could have picked, this one is of special meaning to me and it is exactly as you have felt.
Some things are just meant to be.
Thank you for such kind words. Most appreciated.
~Pamela
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I love this form and have not written in i in a while. You inspire me to do so. Your first line is splendid and pulls the reader into every wiord of your work. You are such an outstanding poet. I adore your poetry, especially when written in Form.
"As waves roll in to suds the shore
your lilting laugh is heard no more.
The sea breathes out its subtle sigh
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky."
Simply breathtaking!
Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in life as well as this contest!
Always ♥
Renee
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Renee
Thank you so much for your kind words and the silver trophy on your contest. I am truly stunned considering he beautiful entries.
This poem is one that is near and dear to me for many reasons and to see in honored means much more than you know. Thank you so much. ~Pamela 
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you sing pammie
wowwee
mally
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mally
Thank you. 
~Pamela
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Excellent
Oh my goodness.
Pam, this is such a beautifully, beautifully penned piece of poetry.
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Congratulations on your most deserved Honourable Mention.
Very well deserved.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Cynthia
Thank you my friend. This one is quite personal. So pleased you enjoyed. ~Pamela
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sad...yet beautiful... a soft flow with touches of serenity and acceptance of loss...great rhthym that is enhanced by the repetition...cool form-a great piece
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aliceramone
One of my favorite Kyrielle's. There is a story behind this piece. It is very personal to me. Thank you for finding it and leaving your impressions.
Kyrielle - is truly cool. One of my favorite forms.
Can't wait to see yours.
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This is filled with sweet sensations......
I really enjoyed the tranquility to this piece. I've been to Portsmouth, England. I didn't get to see much of the coast there, because I was spending so much time roaming around the city. It's definitely one of the favorite ports I visited in 1989. I'd like to try writing a Kyrielle. I'm going to jot that down in my poetry journal.
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knight70
Thank you. I hope you do try a Kyrielle. The repetition can be very effective. Enjoy. ~Pam
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End to beginning
I wanted to see the beginning of your life here at AP, and I have found that it was about an end. Lifes circle how it completes. This grabbed me and was very deep and mournful. A general read but one can take little pieces of it and tie it to their life. isolate it to different points of our own life. Very well written. The first here of 299. Beautiful and see ya at the next 299.
Brian
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Brian
Thank you so much. This poem holds a very special place for me and I am very pleased for your comment here. I love the Kyrielle form and I guess I didn't realize this showed up as the first poem of 299. Something tells me I have to delete some poetry again. Its rare anyone will page back that far to read, but I do thank you for taking the time and for all of your most kind comments. ~Pamela
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What a wonderfully sad poem. Where are my antideporessents? I can see the beauty of this form
and you do it so well. It just plain sings along,
but you captured the mournful tone. While the images and words describe the sadness the way meter of the poem and repeat lines makes a lovely sad flow.
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jeff swan
Thank you. ~Pam
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Pam, I just came back to congratulate you on the award and say that it was a pleasure to be in this contest with you. Two of my favorite forms, yours a kyrielle and mine a sonnet. Keep penning. Love you my friend, Joyce
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Joyce
Thank you so much. An congratulations to you too. ~Pamela
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these reflections fit so well with the theme and the sand and sky. All elements are present here: water, earth, air (thoughts) & the setting sun (which aptly symbolizes the end/start of cycles. The form imparts a certain mystic sense to the piece as each ending line repeats and calls to mind "chant".
Lovely...and best to you in the contest, Blue -
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Blue
Thank you so much for such a kind and courteous review. I appreciate it so much. ~Pamela
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I love this form of poetry and I am always happy to see the repeat line that fits so perfectly into each stanza. This poem was soothing, yet poignant and masterfully written. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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Liz
Thank you so much for your kind words on this piece. The Kyrielle is one of my favorite forms as well. I appreciate your comment very much. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Pam, I agree with Genie totally in her response and also add that the alliteration is stunning. Your elegant verbiage creates such heavenly imagery that you filled this sad and beautiful piece with. One of my most favorite of form poems as I learned from you, the maestro. As we are from the bay state we see the beauty of the ocean and the exquisite sunrises it shares as the rays reflect on the horizon. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece with all of us and best wishes in the contest. It sounds golden to me. Love you my friend, Joyce
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Joyce
You always say such wonderful things. Odd is it not that this poem brought me and my friend together, given the subject matter, who could have known. I always say, there are no coincidences... Thank you again. ~Pamela
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Beautifully written. I love kyrielles and this is a gorgeous example of the form. Superb meter, excellent rhymers, powerful refrain and excellent form. All of these things combined really bring the content alive and make it memorable.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
Note: Due to high volume of entries, I'll be using a scoring system to judge after the contest closes.
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~Genie~
Thank you for your lovely words on this piece. I appreciate them so much. You really have some Top Notch entries. Good luck in the voting and thank you for a most excellent contest. ~Pamela
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"Oh how I miss your perfect face
that smiled with joy and beauty's grace,
now blended with the tears I cry
where sky meets sand and sand meets sky."
Ohhh, this one aches...You could not have known how deeply this one would move me, Pamela...You see, as I mentioned, I saw the Pacific in 1996...with Don, the man I lived with for 14 years...we spent a completely perfect day in Laguna Beach, CA...Don passed away in December 2003...We'd gone through some tragic losses the last few years we had together; I'd lost my mother & one of my sisters, he'd lost both his mother & father...We were so weary of going to funerals...Once, he exclaimed, "It's only a shell!" I sighed & said, "Yes, but if you hold it gently to your ear, you can still hear the whisper of the ocean." It seemed to bring him peace...He went Home about a year later...What a beautiful, mournful, loving piece...This is gorgeous, Lady...What incredible talents you hold within your pen...& within your heart...Thank you for choosing this one to send to me...It brought a tearful smile, in remembrance...Brava... Wanda
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Wanda
Thank you so much. It is very hard to say good-bye. Little did I know when I wrote this that is would be a telling of events to come in my own life. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Indeed, it is; those are the hardest words to utter in any language...That's why I never said it, Pamela...Only "I'll see you later"...
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Very Loving poem
I loved reading this one. was so easy as the flow was effortless. Great job
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Sgt B
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment on this piece. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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Wow! This is really beautiful. I've not come across this form before, but I must say you've done this really well. Makes me want to cry (aww)! I love the line 'where sky meets sand and sand meets sky', as it has really powerful imagery and emotion.
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Wolf-cub
Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this piece. ~Pam
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Beautiful poem.
This is beautiful Pamela, a pure delight to read... a yearning that is so plain to see in the words you have penned here... your graphic marries up with the words just perfectly, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. A wonderful form of poetry.
~Katie~
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Would you place this beautiful poemn in contest #31 at The Winkler? allpoetry.com/poets/The%20Winkler
If you have another poem you like well, bring it, too. Ron
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Well, well - what a lovely Kyrielle!
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This is a beautiful entry to our contest and a perfectly executed Kyrielle. I always admire poets who are able to follow form and retain the meaning and imagery. This is a sad poem, yet somehow I also find it hopeful. Your repetition of “where sand meets sand and sand meets sky” really brings the whole poem together in a thoughtful way. I think this is a difficult technique to master because the repetition frequently overtakes the rest of the poem. You have a natural lack of punctuation that also makes the flow of the poem quite peaceful amidst the sadness. Perhaps the more concise thing to say would be that the poem has an air of “resignation” to it. Thank you for entering this lovely poem in the contest. It was a joy to read. Best, Toni
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good form
This is an artistic poem with the form followed explicitly. There is a consistent rhyming pattern and I notice the strict use of eight syllables per line.
The poem contains alliteration, personification and emotion, which are all well expressed.
The concept of where the sand meets the sky, is interesting.
Thank you for entering our competition...Richard..
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That's pretty; I like this form. Good luck in this contest, Pam!
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I like the repeat. It makes it interesting and unique. Great job!! The rhyme doesn't seem forced at all either. Good luck in the contest!
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Butiful
She builds the castles of what was within the sands of her memories.
The footprints of love now washed away by the waves of time.
The echos of the seagulls cry that still remind her of the glow.
A love then lost and never again to know.
I like this form Pamela brilliant will have to try it.
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Bravo!!
Oh, this is wonderful! The repeating line is potent, super-potent, just plain excellent! Loved it! Bravo! Bravo!! -
simply put...this was beautiful. i read it three times, i enjoyed it that much the last line of each stanza read like a melancholic melody...so very sad yet i had to read it more than once
your talent just glows
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Pam a perfect piece .Kyrielle yet another form you have introduced me to I love it.Must look into this form.As ever your use of language is excellent I think i have told you that before.In some works one can pick out one or two good lines,in your work the hard part is to find a bad one.
Beautiful All the best in the contest One to keep an eye one -
Thanks for entering our contest, Pamela! As Richard said earlier, we'll be back by with full comments. Best of luck in the contest! Toots
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where sky meets sand and sand meets sky.
I like that line. From start to end this poem flows like a song. This write touches the heart with its loneliness and the loss of love one endures..beautifully sad. Good luck in the contest..take care. -
Pamela, I love your refrain. It has no monotony at all. It is musically attuned like ... um ... plainsong. This kyrielle is a beautiful elegy. It is given strength by the refrain. The rhyme and metre are well handled and formed. The first lines each time unroll the narrative incrementally. From "where once we walked" to "your lilting laugh is heard no more" to "how I miss your perfect face" to "my heart knows I must set you free"
and finally, "heart feels your spirit soar as one
with heaven's angels".
I feel you have written an excellent form poem. Good luck with it. Ron
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Pam: Thank you for your entry. Welcome to the competition. We will write our comments after judging. Till then, peace to you. Richard.
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the sea breathes out it's subtle sigh - its
Oh how miss your perfect face - you forgot the I
a sad piece - i like this form, i will have to do another sometime, i only have one lol i tend to go for the kyrielle sonnet more spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...
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