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~ I Hate Moments of Pain ~

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~ I Hate Moments of Pain ~



The moment you left
is the same moment I died
Deep inside
Stumbling into whirlpools
Flaying...searching
I lost you in a breath
in a heartbeat
I’ve sunk to the darkest depths
where the light never shines
If only...
that moment could be erased
When you were snuffed like a candle
depleted of life from within my life
I haven’t the strength to swim
or surface again
What’s the point of it all?
you’re never going to be there



So the darkness can have me
I’ll cradle my pain in a far out corner
I won’t be a bother to anyone anymore
just withdraw unto myself
and think of you
...x...

 






 

 

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Author notes

Credit to the picture by Maurice Smith


Written June 9th, 2006

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  • johnslw2002
    July 15, 2006
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    Great poem and wonderfully written. This is a very heartfelt emotional poem showing your great talent for words. Keep up the great writing.


  • Endeavor gold member
    July 5, 2006
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    Just reading again, Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 10, 2006
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    Excellent

    Incredable power in the words, with a tender sadness



    So the darkness can have me
    I’ll cradle my pain in a far out corner
    I won’t be a bother to anyone anymore
    Just withdraw unto myself
    And think of you
    ...x...

    Loved every word


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    June 10, 2006
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    Excellent

    Time heals all pain, there is a saying if it is meant to be it will be. I think now looking at life this saying is correct. maybe instead of hidding in shadows when we get to this stage in life we should just rejoice in what was and move on then not waisting the precious time we have here on earth to be happy. A briolliant but sad write yet one as poets we all seem to write aboput so often. Wishing you all the very best of luck in this contest with this excellent write. Brian.


  • June 10, 2006
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    Excellent

    Lilac, this is a fantastic write . This is full of heartfelt emotions, I wish you the best of luck in the contest .

    Cheers
    Terry


  • EmsandAbs
    June 9, 2006
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    this is excalty how i feel right now

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