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If you can't

If you can't
make the right decisions.

If you can't
be a good friend.

If you can't
contain your anger and hate.

If you can't
keep a promise.

If you can't
hold on to a loved one.

If you can't
have an open heart.

If you can't
trust anyone.

If you never
love anyone.

If you never
take the time.

If you never
keep in touch.

And if you always
have a cold, dark, unforgiving
heart.

Then you belong to no one.


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Written June 9th, 2006

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  • Cloudreamer
    June 10, 2006
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    FIVE STAR

    Whoa. DEEP!!! That was simple yet really impactive. That was. That was...That was... WHOA!!! You are really becoming a fantastic poet! Great work!


  • Spring-Sparrow
    June 9, 2006
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    Boy Chris...I am telling you lil bro, you are getting REALLY good. You have outdone yourself...again! GREAT job.

    I also wanted to let you know that I am SO glad that you enjoy writing poetry, even though it is not very often. It is still great for me to watch you write something extraordinary and think to myself, "that's my little brother."

    You are a GREAT brother, and never forget it.

    Love ya,
    ~Kimmy~


  • Senior09
    June 9, 2006
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    Ouch, very strong. Very bold meaning. I used to be this way, till your father melted my heart , sorry son, but he's amazing. And so is your write. But maybe you should use commas until the very end. Which by the way i loved.

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