I walk where Egypt rests her mighty kings,
that stand the greatest triumph Egypt won,
these pyramids that stretch their noble wings
and sing of heaven's vision to the sun.
These kings believed that they would live again
and certain that the world is just a door
they built these houses so they could remain
above the highest dreams of mortal law.
These tombs that live a monument to prayer
and vault the wealth of ancient history,
brave Egypt, I can only stand and stare,
in honour to your strength and artistry.
How far beyond the stars you held divine
do you now rest proud Egypt's precious line?
Author notes
The Great Pyramid of Giza
In a list
A contest entry
- The EGYPT Contest!!! by NooNiThEWitcH.
463 points, ended August 1, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I love the flow in this. It makes it really fun to read aloud, it just rolls off the tongue. good luck in the contest.
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Nice! Shorter than my line limit but I'm keeping it anyways.
I liked it, simple wording and rhyme..
Though I don't like: "They built these houses so they could remain" 'houses' does not fit in with the grandeur of the ancient Egyptians or especially with the pyramids. Though I do get your meaning.
Thank you for entering in my contest. Keep on writing, and good luck,
Nooni
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Beautiful
i'm honored to have a poem in the same contest i love the line "Above the highest dreams of mortal law." in particular. i've never been to Egypt but it's a place i HAVE to visit before i die, that's for sure. keep writing! -Jamie
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So true..so true!
it is mystifying when we look at the pyramids...always
grabs the attention as we ponder their beauty and
strength!
well written!
ears/Seattle
way to write!
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pyramids are a constant reminder that the rare is only for the rare...the highest knowledge is off limits to the masses
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Good one those pyramids made the ancient Egyptian kings widely known in the past and the Egyptians honored now..good describing.
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I love this!!!!
I have always been drawn to beautiful Giza.
You did that magnificent place real justice.
Great poetry my friend!
wolf
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they did have heaven but it was in the stars not a traditional Christian heaven thanks for commenting my friend
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heavens vision - heaven's vision - perhaps also having heaven as Heaven? Though that is a choice and perhaps not having it is the right way seeing as though the Egyptians did not really believe in Heaven as such. Spill ink and twist me into the shape of love...
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This is really amazing and wonderful. You described everything here so well. And the poem is BEAUTIFUL!
I loved this line:
"And vault the wealth of ancient history"
I'm from Egypt (but Cairo).
Thank you soo much for writing and sharing this.
Keep on writing and good luck in the contest.
Nooni
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WOW! This is a GLORIOUS poem filled with amazing words full of wonder and such excellent imagery. I felt transported to Ancient Egypt and standing at the pyramids admiring the thoughts that must have gone into creating them, admiring their beauty and splendour, admiring the noble Kings who now rest in peace with their treasures, admiring their beliefs and admiring the wealth this land possesses. Your sonnet flowed beautifully, has excellent words that depict beauty and wonder, the rhymes are very good and so is the meter. I love the question posed at the end of the poem. It made me read the poem nearly 5 times and I enjoyed it a lot each time. Just 2 small things: In the second line I believe it should be "That stood the greatest triumph Egypt won" and not "That stand the greatest triumph Egypt won". In the third last line I believe it should be "In honour of your wealth and artistry" and not "In honour to your wealth and artistry".
Best wishes in the contest,
Charishma
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Nermin- that is one of the nicest comments I've ever had -a big thankyou
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Very nice verses and interesting way to write a tribute to this great land of past. Great sonnet. I wish you a lot of luck in contest.
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Beautiful and makes me feel so nostalgic to t
I love it. I feel I am there in Guiza and looking thoughtfully at the Pyramids. they are all you said and more.
i love the words you chose and i close my eyes while hearing those words, i am transported there in front of these collosal buildings. A SALUTE TO YOU FROM ME AND THE LAND OF THE PHARAOHS AND THE PYRAMID, TO YOU.
Edited on Jun 11, 3:03 because 'SALUTE TO YOU'.
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