The bubbles get more color
As they sink among the broken sea.
Drenched in life and drowned in hate and raging anger.
The waves crushed the spirit
And distracted the water
From the path of the journey it was taking.
Everything stirs and spins,
Not knowing where to go next.
Confusion awoke as the sun broke down
Shamelessly running away
To hide behind the hills.
ALL BECAUSE ONE THING WENT WRONG.
And that was that.
The day came to an end and all that was left
Was a bundle of everything no one wants.
Author notes
I wrote this after getting off of a ferry in Seattle.
Written June 9th, 2006
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**thinks about when you wrote this** haha wow...thats...wow...hmm...soooooo....i must ask you the same thing i asked everyone else. what makes this poem amazing??
-Anthony -
Wow this was really good. I loved it, great style and the content was amazing. Very descriptive. Keep up the good work!!!!!
Love the one and only never phony,
xX Young Black Woman Xx -
I liked it, didnt get to understand much.. Must be a slow day for me..wel hope i am encouragin ya.
Well Keep it up n as ppl say here, keep that pen flowing.
Cheers -
This was a cute poem! I like it abunch, though I'm not sure exactly what it is talking about, such as the ONE thing that went wrong... I didn't get that! Anyway I liked your structure loads because you don't really see it that often (not like me, I always write with a stuck-to-the-left structure...)Anyway, good write and well done!
Kaelin -
thats was very funny!!! I lim,ed your closing line a lot! at first i was dissmissove but i apologoe for that. your one clever gal!!!
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Very cool, Claire. A ferry boat ride in Seattle. Sounds great, and seems you were looking and thinking the whole time too. Good job.
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