Lost in this haze of emptiness,
the void of loneliness encompasses
all...
Anger at those who look on
with pity in their gaze, unwanted
sympathy...rejected...tainted
blurred recollections, fragmented
images float in the myriad of the
mind, tempting and teasing
in the darting of concentration
...always slightly out of reach;
Gathering sensibility as a cloak,
this mantle of reason lends a
guiding hand;
Another day will perhaps bring
comfort to a bleeding soul and
if not...continuity.
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Written June 9th, 2006
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Yes my friend, you "read" me well...I always know when I write something of this nature that at least one person amongst us truely knows what I am driving at and for that I am grateful
Thank you for your kind thoughts and good wishes, as always they are appreciated 
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Thank you
Glad you approve
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Aw, many thanks for your lovely comments...I am back now after a family bereavement so hopefully I shall get some more poems written
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Aw, many thanks for your lovely comments...I am back now after a family bereavement to hopefully I shall get some more poems written
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Thank you and yes I will
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Hello my friend Many thanks for the kind words, I am sorry for the absence but we had a bereavement and I am only now back at the computer...it is lovely to be missed, so thank you
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I will try to explain how I feel when using certain words in poems... To me, my mind works rather like a deep dark pool of thoughts, some useful but many useless. Sifting through this uses much concentration to try to find the correct place in which to use it...hence the word "myriad". I hope this helps
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Thank you Robert for your kindness and as always it is greatly appreciated
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Many thanks for your kindness
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It's 'funny' how he best poetry is created in the midst of inner torment. Ms Cutie you have written a gem here. I hope you are feeling OK (now); knowing you as I do it would be silly to hope that the focus of this poem is the observation of another as I know for you that that would be the same as your own trouble. May the morning sun be softer tomorrow and the coffee taste sweeter. ---- Thank you.
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the color scheme of this one is good. I liked the opening of it. the rest of it was o.k it has a good flow to it. a good work on this one.
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Where have you been? This is a marvelous write. You are a very good and a strong writer. I love this piece. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing. You have a great one
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A great read nonetheless.
Keep it up and keep that pen flowing.
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Hi my friend a good write, one reads much between the lines, hope you are well we do not seem to crass pathes often these days, all the best you have my applause hugs Di
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very good
I enjoyed reading this very much.
I don't understand exactly what you mean by your use of "myriad" in the line:
"fragmented
images float in the myriad of the
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This is a very creative poem very visiual thoughts ran through my mind while reading the words I felt as if I was starring into
A mirror gazing back at the worlds madness and pale infatuations
Left unreflected in anger and self rage, An amazing poem very powerful thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work.. -
Sort of reminds me of one of my recent pieces. Some nice word usage. The description was intelligent but not overdone. Unlike some poems, this one still makes sense.
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