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When I close my Eyes

a

when I think of you and close my eyes
a sun opens the empty skies
and pulls me towards
you

b

there is a circular gateway behind my eyelids
its golden path leads towards
midnight blue rooms
and white

c

now I can see the warmth of your soul
underneath the moist crust of eden
your broken flesh
rest

d

I feel complete in the knowing
that the cancer had stopped
its gnawing pain
forever

e

how soothing the sorrowful fact that none
of the lies of this wretched world
can ever again turn you
homeless

f

letters still arrive for you
the key to the post box
does not fit
anymore

g

within my soul your room is still intact
daily I fold away your clothes
in cupboards non-
existent

h

your watch had stopped long ago
why did you not tell me
you did not need time
anymore?

i

now that you are gone I can write
about the joy of knowing
you will never again be
gone

j
o
h
a
n
n

myra
09.06.2006






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Written June 9th, 2006

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  • myrataal silver member
    June 9, 2006
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    Thank you dearest One for correcting my own summersault ...

  • Pataliyah
    June 9, 2006
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    Bella, bella...your lovely spirit..


  • mentalyunsound
    June 9, 2006
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    i really like it cant wait to read the rest


  • individuality gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    when I think of you and close my eyes
    a sun open the empty skies
    and pull me towards
    you

    should there not be plural here? opens and pulls?


    there is a circular gateway behind my eyelids
    its golden path leads towards
    midnight blue rooms
    and white

    i like this one - very rich in description, beautiful.


    now I can see the warmth of your soul
    underneath the moist crust of eden
    your broken flesh
    rest

    i think of dreaming here of later time where you may join love.


    I feel complete in the knowing
    that the cancer had stopped
    its gnawing pain
    forever

    this could be dual - cancer in someone released to death or cancer in mourning taking control of a life still living. good either way.


    how soothing the sorrowful fact that none
    of the lies of this wretched world
    can ever again turn you
    homeless

    definitely a fare the well here with no more lies of the mad world to torment.

    overall my verdict is somersaulting a smile


  • leo2
    June 9, 2006
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    When I saw the title and read the first line I thought it was going to be similar to my "When I Think Of You". While I was mourning the loss of love you're are mourning the loss of a loved one. It is comforting to know that once this mortal shell is gone our soul has a home forever.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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