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Liquid Illusion

 





Ultra violet rays pommel ivy tones into a fiery stained scarlet
Lack of shade causes perspiration to drop from scorched brow
Stark columns now rubberized appendages from a lengthy trek
Parched and pale lips painfully crack beneath the sun's drying kiss




Rolling copper hills run vast and wide before distressed eyes
Mountains of sand covered with S-shaped tracks give direction
Invisibly asphyxiated by a briskly blowing super heated current
Dehydration of the pallet driving thirst to colossal proportions




Overrun from exhaustion, struggling to journey onward
Knees buckle and cave, collapsing upon the sweltering sands
Striving to crawl and scratch through granulated sand valleys
In the distance thunderous roars speak of possible precipitation




Salvation a mere glimmer in the psyche, extinction is eminent
There, upon the outskirts, rising like a phoenix from the ashes
A statuesque Goddess stands in shadowed pools of crystal blue
Tranquil exquisiteness silently singing a siren's haunting song




Inch by inch moving closer, motivated by carnal cravings
Lips cry for the drink to quench this seemingly undying thirst
Frustration increases as deliverance grows more unattainable
Surging forth mesmerized by an intoxicating voice of serenity




Lightening crashes, ripping through a haze of humidity
The flood gates of heaven burst, spilling monsoon rains
Feeding the body and soul laying upon drowning sands
Sturdy stone columns return as rejuvenation is completed




The enchanting song of the seductive temptress is no more
Gone, like a thief in the night.....reality or just a mere liquid illusion










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Written June 9th, 2006

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  • Forms of Me
    June 23, 2006
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    You have a wonderful talent for creating imagery within your poetry. This is a lovely write. The picture is very complimentary of the words....you have done such a wonderful job here.

    LIZ


  • Sonja
    June 10, 2006
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    Great verses and nice and interesting used words takes me a time to read it but it worth each minute I spent on your site. Also very interesting finish, like a very special "temptress of life". Your verses are perfect connetcet with picture you add above.
    ~Sonja~


  • tomisb
    June 9, 2006
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    ah but some would suffer to maintaing the mirage. Very nicely written and well spelled. It had a nice flow and rythmn. I enjoyed the ride immensely.

    I admit we come from different schools of poetic write. I was taught for years that less is more, fewer words and tighter lines, more percision requires less be said. You take a deeper and richer pallet rout. I find it enchanting and well done. Definitely not over blown. I like the way you still managed to pull me along through the poem and create a sense of passion. Well done. Tom B.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    June 9, 2006
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    excellent~

    Beautiful so very impressive and stunning and just your perfect style...
    Best of luck in the contest sis tho I don't think you will need it...
    I am having surgery next Wed may be in ICU a few days please keep me in your thoughts and prayers
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • Celticmoon
    June 9, 2006
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    Just a quick question,

    You have commented on my work before and I am just curious as too how many times you actually read it since you seem to have used the very comment you have posted here on this piece of mine to 14 other writes by various poets?

    Just curious if you truly ever have an original thought on someone's work but then again I guess that means you would have to first read it. Nice little scam you have to add up points quickly.


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    June 9, 2006
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    Ultra violet rays pommel ivy tones into a fiery stained scarlet
    Lack of shade causes perspiration to drop from scorched brow

    I adore the imagery in those lines, absolutely beautiful. So visual, really feels natural under the picture, it lives up to it.

    I loved this sweety

    jess


  • melphleg gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Reminds me how lust leaves us thirsty. It has an illusion that promises satisfaction, but it is like water from a cistern with holes. It has promise but is empty.


  • Room without doors gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    This is really stunning.I like your poems. You have a real talent with words. I especially like the image mere liquid illusion - great lat line


  • forget my name
    June 9, 2006
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    Wow had to dig out the dictionary for this one. Hah no I'm kidding. Brilliant wordplay, brilliant imagery, brilliant work. Nicely done


  • poeticweaver gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Awesome Work!

    I look above, I see the elements you bring, tasting, seeing, inhaling the beauty of what lies within your poetic piece, and I say to myself, this is good!

    Thanks for your entry, love ya sweet soul!
    -Timothy The Poetic Weaver~


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Awesomely and wonderfully beautiful, my friend! Your talent never fails to amaze me; I think I'm jealous!
    The best of luck to you in the contest though I think you have a winner here!


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    June 9, 2006
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    This is most impressive. It is filled with both beauty and imagery. I have really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing and Best wishes in the contest. This is definately gold worthy...

    *Ktulu Blackwolfe*


  • cherche -d -ame
    June 9, 2006
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    I agree that the pic reminds me of Royo's style. Your words bring forth old legends that truly are becoming a thing of the past....we do not tell them to our children anymore ( as tey are busy playing assasin games on the computer) but I so enjoyed this. I do have this oicture , but have as of yet found what to do with it. it fits here perfectly Best wishes my friend in this contest and in life,
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
    reenie


  • masterblaster gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    Hi very lovely write, pic looks like a Royo or someone doing his style, lovely feel in this write, a pleasure to read, all the best, hugs Di


  • Christina Prince
    June 9, 2006
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    Awsome!

    You give the reader a really complex set of sounds, smells and visions in this peice. Although I'm sick I felt myself permeated by the images in your poem to the core. This poem is masterfully done! Bravo!


  • wbiro gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    great title, sis... now the contest said to write on what you do best... so I'm wondering, 'What is it here that you're doing best?' is it the abstract images, or the emotions, or writing on the struggle of life... yes, I'll bet that's it! With an occasional soothing rain in the form of a friend...


  • Always Deena
    June 9, 2006
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    I see you still got it,damn I need it! Great Write,Bel
    Miss you,
    Deena


  • linx20
    June 9, 2006
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    This was a work of art. I have seldom seen words paint a picture so vividly. Great work.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 9, 2006
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    oh my sweet lioness what a beautiful image filled write displaying the daunting yet rewarding journey of a life finding the true nature of self so very well done I love it!
    love,
    Blaze
    Edited on Jun 09, 2:38 because ''.

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