How did it start?
It began with make believe
But now it's so much more
It is us, you see
I was alone
Until you rescued me
And you were cold
Until I cracked your ice
It's been so long
Almost a full year now
Since we met
And since we fell in love
You tried to hide
Behind a wall of ice
But somehow I could see
The hidden warmth inside
I was naive
I couldn't even see
All that I had
Because I had no one
In my heart
Where there was once a hole
Of emptiness and pain
Now your love exists
I once thought
That I'd never belong
But now I've found
The place where I should be
You make me smile
With just the simplest word
You bring me joy
Whenever I'm with you
Don't be afraid
To have me at your side
I'll light the way
Down your darkened path
You are my love
You are my everything
I am to you
What you are to me
Author notes
This poem is for Kelsey Sisko.
Written June 9th, 2006
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Aw.thats so sweet and nice.Good job.
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This reminds me of a poem i wrote, called "Rescue Me"......except this is what happens after i get rescued lol. Good write you seem real and honest in your writes.
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Man i was the last comment aswell.
Well a new comment to supersede the old. You love her a lot more than I can. And I respect you in so many ways that it hurts that you aren't with her. Even when I am. I feel like I have betrayed you in some weird way. It doesn't even matter now she isn't with me either. I think I'll stay your friend for a while and not your "Best Friend with a Girlfriend who he won't shut up about" >/ -
Great
Dude Is This About Bitch Factor ( For Lack Of A More Secretive Name.) Great Read.
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Aww. This was a cute poem, very passionate and shows a lot of feeling between the two of you in the relationship. What I like most about it is that you showed feeling for the person in which you were writting about. It showed that you actually cared for her not like she was just a fling. THere was more there for the reader rather than just setting it on the top. It was in depth and you had to pay attention and learn to understand the poem to know what you meant. But the main thing about this poem is that you showed passion and love. Good job on this. I hope to read more of your poetry when I have the time to. This was an excellent write. Great job and keep them comming. -Juarez
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Love it
Well I'm a bit late for reading, but hey, better late than never right?
As everyone has already mentioned...GREAT WRITE!! (now I'm jealous, I wish I could wirte love stuff this good)...maybe I should take notes.
Hopefully whomever the lucky girl is, knows it, and hope everything works out well for you. Just remember my dear dear friend, I'm always here for you. Just an IM or email away.
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Aali
Ah you surprised your readers with your pen.. As I was reading this I saw the pen is turning and as with that my eyes is turning, too. I think the only thing makes this piece of poem (And the little feeling of you to your girl) strong was the pure love or as your words The True Love. (And it must be unjust to ignore the power of this poet on writing.
Thanks for sharing this with us
~Massy~
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Wow, this is such a great piece. I really love this. This is beautifully written.
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Awwwes Oren.
Lovely poem. Love is such a beautiful thing. Hopefully things will turn out your way. Keep up the awesome work!
Blessed Be.
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ahh.. such is love.
^_^ good luck man. (not that you'll need it, of course)
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perfection at its greatest
this is beautiful...i usualy hate romance...but this touches me deeply. some lucky girl must be very happy right now. thanks for making some one happpy. we need more ppl like you. then maybe the world wouldn't suck so much.
again, beautiful poem. i loved every word.
<3 dark angel in white
Edited on Jun 12, 1:20 p.m. because 'i spelled "angel" wrong'. -
You missed reading my poems?....Wow....I'm really flattered. I really am....
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omg this is really sweet. now i remember why i missd reading ur poems. too bad this wanst a good day for a love poem...but it was amazing. u shood be very proud. clasp for u!!!
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great
this is a very nice poem i really enjoyed reading it it describes the pain of love. you should check out my poem called black rose garden. its about me and my lover. -
this makes me miss him and wish I didnt have summer school, because i dont mean to sound juvenile, but I can soo see the kindness and flame and everything beneath his sufraface... sigh... he's just the most beautiful guy in the world. *relizes you dont know what the hell shes talkling about and shuts up*
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You're so lucky to be in a relationship like this. And you got it down on paper very well. This is great, thank you for entering, and good luck!
♥
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Its Beautiful Oren. Just beautiful...
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you go oren you work that lovin WORK IT WORK IT make her mush inside your arms aye sorry it took so long for me to read it ive been asleep i just woke up good job
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^_^ Thanks Nikki
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oren, this is a beautiful piece you have penned here, right from your heart. Knowing you both and what you both have been through gives me the privalage to tell you on a more personal note that i am happy that you two are going strong and i am proud of both of you.
love you both.
and all the best to your future
Nikki
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smiles Thanks Ahtemu ^_^ I hope she likes it
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Oh my god, this is no joke, exactly like me and my boyfriend Cliff, we have been together for about one year, and i was cold, and he was alone. It was cool to read about another couples relationship that is identical to mine. Very nice write, and very dedicated. I hope you guys continue loving each other no matter what comes your way.
Autumn
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