Such a beautiful mind
That rose out of pain,
Such a beautiful and amazing
intellect
That vanquished torment,
Such a clear vision and strong willpower,
A resolve of steel determined to find love
And uphold what's earned so far.
Such a mighty heart that was
Failed and knifed,
Such a beautiful spirit
For uprightness and warmth so avid,
Such a beautiful soul to God's
And individuals' love so embracing
And starving,
Such handsome face and body
which splendor is skin deep and encompassing,
Such a beautiful and caring and love seeking
Ayten, a human you'd be smitten with as a whole,
Such a valuable Ayten, my friend, people feel affection for,
Such a charming and kind-hearted Ayten,
I implore you God, love her and save her from harm,
She needs you to vanquish her
Fears and calm her worries, God of Love
God of the Universe.
Nermin
Author notes
This is about Ayten my friend and a fellow poet on A/P
and it is dedicated to her. She is all that is said about her in this piece and a lot more.
Written June 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- tell me about your best friend by wings from god 28.
575 points, ended January 12, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Rose For You In Appreciation. by Poetryintheblood.
425 points, ended August 18, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Thank you for your beautiful dedication, good luck in my contest, Josie
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greatpoem
thank you for entering my contest good luck.
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Such beautiful verses
From the pen so pure
Such beautiful thoughs
From the heart indeed
Such beautiful a poet
That writes so well
Thanks for sharing such beautiful words that really mean. Enjoy -
Thank you, thank you, thank you. i didnt really think of the words, it was a mere expression of what i know and feel about one fellow poet on AP who is really all that, despite the hardships and pain she encountered and is still encountering in her life takes each day as it comes with open arms. she surprises me the more i know her.
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Maybe be it was just the big words you used or the way you used them! but please dont change it! It was a very lovely poem and the unclear part is on my half, ill reread and make more sense out of such a wonderful poem!
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hiii! thanks for allowing me in the contest. why was it difficult for you to read? your mean the words or concept was unclear? please elaborate.i might be able to make changes to make it more understood. thanks
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What a beautiful poem! It was a bit difficult for me to read, but that didnt stop the impact of your words! Im glad you could speak such wonderful words about your wonderful freind! thank you for entering and good luck!
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Darling NN
There is this cool contest where you put your poem and you indicate a comment to it you particularly like. Well, that way we are collaborating. I think this is one of t hose if you like. Please see this contest. allpoetry.com/Contest/2127513
Smoosh
Janet -
Afarin
What a beautiful/honest piece of poem it was, Nermin. I wonder how you found these poetic words. Happy to your friend, Ayten that you have such feeling about her. I liked the beautiful wishes you made for her at the end the most: “I implore you God, love her and save her from harm,/She needs you to vanquish her/Fears and calm her worries, God of Love/God of the Universe.” It was maybe the most strong part of your poem. And you reminded me to something interesting, too. If someone loves everyone, then God will be all Love. If someone be kind and beautiful (Not outside of course, I mean inside and his/her manner although if someone is beautiful in manner, we feel he or she in beautiful in appearance, too. Did you mention it?) then he/she will find God as absolute kindness and beautifulness.
I’m so lucky to read this beautiful poem, my new muslim friend.
Thanks for sharing this magnificent poem with us :-)
~Masoomeh~
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Darling
I love your write
about needing God's might
girlfriend, we need air
to really be fair.
OK, us women pray
as men just play
we confess to drinks
about how love stinks.
But once so fueled
our anger then cools
another guy's flirting grin
again our hopes begin.
Smoosh
Janet -
my dear i missed you so and so did everyone and we were so worried about you. i hope that everything is fine with you dear Raneah. missed u sooooooo.
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you have a beautiful poem on your hands this is just beautiful and so glad to be back to read your poetry I've missed you so...
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Thank you dear Rich and thank you for your nice words of encouragement and friendship
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I am so glad to meet you...and this...so beautiful and rich with spirit...I have added you to my favorites...and I am looking forward to many more wonderful poems...
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Thank you dear for such encouraging wonderful words. i know i havent been around much but i will read more of your poetry. lots of love
nermin -
Outstanding
This poem is full of sensitivity and respect for human life. It has a wonderful spirituality about it, caring and sincere. Every respect for an outstanding poem -
Thank you Aun, you are yourself a Great writer with such beautiful unique style. your words count a lot and YOU MADE MY DAY. THANKS DEAR
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Such a beautiful
Such a beautiful poem
That sounds good
Such beautiful verses
That ryme good
Such beautiful words
That mean good
Such a beautiful thought
That is so deep
Such a beautiful idea
That seems good
Such a beautiful poet
That writes good -
all i can say is that this is beautiful, especially since it is written for a friend who seems just wonderful.
great write, and a pleasure to read
best wishes,
neri
Now gotto go watch the game
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oh my darling you are so beautiful. thank you love, i love you. one day you will meet her!
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this piece is perfection...& no i do not mean perfect, i mean perfection!!
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Thank you my friend. i think so too, i will work more on that as i fail to be prolific like others are. i dont why really. maybe i have to feel something or believe in it so much
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Your empathy towards others is amazing. I think your best work is when you honor others. And well it should be. A pleasure to stop by again nd visit with you. Peace.
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in fact she did. i didnt tell her that i wrote it but she discovered it by mere coincidence, it was so funny!
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thank you my dear. i suffered poisonous snakes enough in my life and there are a lot more, so i appreciate good hearts and souls.
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Wow this is wonderfull and a lucky friend indeed, such wonderfull words of poetry.
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Aw, Ayten must love this. This is really sweet, I loved it. Thanks for entering, and good luck!
♥
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Linda dear thanks a zillion, i am glad you liked it. i was thinking much of her and as we actually met and became friends and knew more about her, i had to write something about her.
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Thank you lovely Chelsea, she deserves love and so do you lovely heart. bless you dear, and by the way, those words coming from you mean a whole lot to me.
lots of love
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Thanks William, i am glad you liked it. she deserves it, she rose from a lot of pain and is still fighting like a lot of you here and i am lucky to have met her. she is very special dear.
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Thank you Sonja my dear friend. yes friends are the water of love, i mean real friends, that provide our life with real love and happiness. thank you dear.
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WRITE ONN NERMIN!!
awesome empathetic prayer to the universe in such a grand and sweeping way. U GO GURL..!!!
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My darling thank you. i am still limping but better, and i feel better because despite being in this state i can relax as i was on the verge of a nervous breakdown from work.
love you
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verypretty indeed love the friendship in this, thank you for sharing and good luck..
Linda -
Frends are very important. When you can share your thought without words that's a real friendship. Your poem is talking to us about a friendship I was talking about. Very nice and soft flowing verses. Great tribute to Ayten
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wow...this is so beautiful my dear Nermin. I'm sure she'll love it.
I'm glad you're back again. Hope you're getting better.
Shahrzad
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Wow. This write has a lot of meaning behind it. I think that's really sweet of you to write about someone like that. I've always found it difficult to write about a person you know. I can see the obvious
talent and wisdom in your writing. Hope to hear more...
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thanks gorgeous! yeah self-sufficient Cairo women, whatever what means! such wise words! LOL
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Ohhhh honey thank you sooo much... You are my dearest friend.... like a ray of sunshine you came into my cloudy life forcing you the clouds back. With love, and wisdom you helped me stay the path.
So my darling girl here's to us self sufficiant cairo women... You are a pillar of womenly strength. Luv ya so much hunz -
This is beautiful. What a fantastic tribute to your friend.
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THANK YOU! as usual you make my day, although it is past noon, so afternoon.
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Excellent tribute ... full of love.
Exquisite!!!
Cheers!!
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Thank you dear Babby, yes she is all and more. thank you Babby for being our friend, a nice sweet heart and soul like you. well i guess i could say, birds of a feather flock together.
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