Long antenna caressing me with electric kisses soft,
I moan
and hold the desiring, restless body of her, the alien in space,
alone;
coursing through our veins a strong and unmistakable mutual
need
embraced in fluid movement with only our universal love
between.
Through a time-lit portal old, fine scents of a heavenly wonder
inter
the seconds with the stretch of eons filled with longing thoughts of
her;
her alien skin so warm and soft, my earthly skin so bronze and
strong
we firmly hold each other tight, I hungrily hold the moment
long…
Nowhere in the galaxy-wide were two so different now as
one,
they’ll sing for years about our night in pleasant soft romantic
song–
how an alien race was forever born from the mad and passionate love of
two
and more about the immeasurable mysteries of my deep and cosmic love for
you.
Author notes
a love I never had...
Written June 8th, 2006
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hmmm...aliens....and making love, no less...
You got my attention...held it...and captivated my imagination...
love...Lane
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Beautifuly written! Truly inspired! The word-combinations are so original and the effect is amazing! Not mentioning that the perspictive is very original indeed.Well done!Keep up the good work!
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lol I like it much better, glad I could help, even if my ideas were slightly off
. You don't owe me anything my friend, but if you should like to, then you are certainly welcome to it.
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thanks, vicarious, for I have tinkered with that second line, and to fix it, it actually needed more syllables! lol (which added a nice dimension!) so I owe you a constructive critique...!
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First off, let me say that I am stunned at your thoughts and in depth descritions in this piece. You not only were succesful in allowing your reader to relate love to such a strange lifeform, like an alien, but do so in a way that made it seem simply like the norm. As if it were not, in fact, weird at all. But meant to be. Which is the way love should feel, regardless of who or what is whith. I absolutley loved your sense of erotica, yet not in a way that actually involved typical sexual enuendos. It was completely original, and yet, still had the same, if not a greater, effect. I do think, however that this line
"and hold the desiring, restless body of you, the alien, here,"
interupts your flow tremendously. For in it, you have 3 commas, and more syllables than in most of your other lines. It seems to stick out like a sore thumb to the reader. I do like how it stresses the fact that your love, is in fact, an alien. Id just like to make sure that was its intention Your very first line absolutely blew me away, the image and feeling that I got out of it was one of the most intense I can imagine. Your use of vocab shows great skill, and the words are picked to near perfectiong. A brilliant write indeed.
P.S.- thanks for adding me to your group
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for you I should have had something to do with the ear... oh swt daugther of mine!
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i find this amusing
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alien encounters? would it leave goo infact dont answer, beautifully written poem as always brother, some wonderful words to describe! just cant get the image of alien goo out of my mind giggles xx cheryl xx
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Very original and kind of weird. But it was well written and had some good points.
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A very interesting take on this conest! Original and weirdly sweet! lol.
Great entry!
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Well they love is universal right?Never read a poem like dis b4, dont worry it doesnt mean its not great!
Loved the ryhmes.
Keep it up and hope ya win.
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ALien Love! How bizarre and unusual. You have quite the imagination. I quite enjoyed how you suggest that a love between two so different will become legendary. Excellent write.
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It's erotica, but with aliens! Most erotica leaves me cold and that's when it involves humans, so I don't think I was ever going to get much from this. Even the sci-fi geek in me was thinking, "just write about having sex with gillian Anderson".
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Stunning
Hi there...
Well I must say that this is one awesome poem...I saw that one said it was a bit strange...Honey it was everything but strange...I have to agree with tualau-goddess it left me longing for more...I love the background and everything about the poem
Excellent job & good luck in the contest
Much Love
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wow awesome this was great! the background goes very well, good choice ... it was very passionate and almost left me longing for more! ... cept tht wuda been quite disturbing i would hve had mental images of a human and an alien having sex. you finished it just right, congrats on that!
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This is great Wayne. Very well done. It even rhymed.
Anna.
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Great. just great.
Wow this was a break from the norm. The control you used when talking about the alien. I like how it embraced so many sci-fi thoughts. -
very good
oh i just loved this one great work my freind keep it up ..he he he yes keep it up, a most interestingly ,refreshingly diferent read very good he he he very good indeed 
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Hehe... definitely different and interesting. I think Toots hit it-- I can't laugh but I can't take it seriously. Good write though, and best of luck in the contest!
Elizabeth
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Quite nice! I can't exactly laugh, and I can't exactly take this seriously. Must just be me, but I do see the sarcasm and humor in the poem, and I really do like it every bit as much as all your others I have read. Great job! Best, Toni
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memorable
cool and cool! i once wrote a short story about a love shared by this college journalist type and the co-dependant alien that he finds in a tree while jogging one day. your poem brought to my mind a story that i loved but had not thought of in ages! thanks for the memories! -
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very interesting... awesome rhymes though -
amazing
its strange but very sweet. nothing speaks quite as clearly as the language of touch. its well written and the imagry is amzing. i like this and you managed to make wierd beautiful.nice job.
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Not my style
To be perfectly honest, I didn't really like it, I can't really get into the theme, it sorta creeped me out. The imagery was good though, it painted a vivid enough picture for me to cringe inwardly. Nice write. Not my style. -
wow, ummmm.....brilliantly written, a bit strange lol....that is a nice background. its really pretty, i like the flow and rhymes you used....great poem
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Excellent!
Very interesting and thought provoking write.
This is such a unique and different topic for me.
You did a great job with it though.
I love the background and the imagery you used throughout this write.
I love this line, "Nowhere in the galaxy-wide were two so different now as one."
Like a dangerous and impossible dream coming true and happening in real life. Something that we all fear but with this write, you have made the reader look at it in a different perspective.
Wonderful work here and I enjoyed read it. Thank you for sharing this write!
Allen0826
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