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Day after day
She sits on the end of her bed
Crying
Asking herself unanswerable questions

She'll sit there for hours
Rubbing the red parts raw
Made by her mother
The one who couldn't hold back

Her smile is fading away
As she prays every night
Asking God to end it all
Erase every last scar

Each night she goes to bed
Wishing tomorrow will be better
If not
Please don't come at all

If given one last question
She'd ask why
All she ever did was love
All she ever did was smile

Author notes

Constructive Critisism Welcome. This is about a great friend of mine whom i consider a sister, her name is Stephani Lynn. This poem was sparked over a conversation we had.
Written June 7th, 2006

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  • Soul Blight
    February 16

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    Good imagery

    I really liked the last part because it contrasted that she didn't deserve what she went through.

    Great Job!


  • infamous sorrows
    June 18, 2006
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    i like the way this poem was written, its a beautiful poem =]


  • Inside and out
    June 11, 2006
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    This poem is beautiful. Your thoughts and emotions are expressed so effectively throughout this tender poem. I am sitting here with a heavy heart reading these words. To know that this is a true accounting is something that makes me very sad. To know that this is something that has happened to one of the sweetest people that I know, makes me cry.
    Thank you for sharing this and increasing awareness .


  • Jenn-Swenson
    June 10, 2006
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    wow amazing write. i loved it.dont know what else to say but i loved it.


  • wings of purity
    June 8, 2006
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    awesome and touching

    so much emotion thats all i ahve to say this is an awesome write im jealous of you


  • xBrokenxSmilesx
    June 7, 2006
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    i loved it too much not to cry ♥


  • BeautifulAngelicSin
    June 7, 2006
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    Im glad you like it. I didnt mean to make you cry tho!

  • xBrokenxSmilesx
    June 7, 2006
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    <3 i love you and this poem is beautiful sweetie. thank you for writing something like this for me. I love you.
    ♥ you're amazing.
    i cant say much more loves.
    ~stephani


  • blakdiamone
    June 7, 2006
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    great

    Hey, I really don't like depressing poetry but this one caught my attention. I actually liked it and I honestly wish that there was something i could do to make you happy. So if you can, put on a smile for me even though i can't see you.

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