Watching through the hourglass
Even angels shed a tear
At the suffering of so many
Hiding in loves shadow
And cursed by promises broken
Angels hear the echoes
From a world of hearts pouring out
Through tear stained eyes
The never ending story of love
And the pain of its lost reflection
Angels send their wishes with the wind
To all those bleeding hearts
For strength and courage
To step out from that broken shadow
Love left in its wake
And seek the afterglow
Angels understand our desires
To be bathed in loves glorious light
They want to wipe away our tears
They want to help soothe our soul
Securing their desire for a world
Filled with peaceful hearts
So spare a thought
Next time Cupid's arrow goes astray
And you feel like a passenger
On loves militant cruise
You have a silent partner sharing your pain
Hiding way above the world
Even angels cry.
Author notes
This piece just gave birth to itself in one inspired moment. It was only a day or so later my very good friend Elevens-Rae read it and it helped her through a tough time and also inspired a brilliant poem of her own called "Giving In To Loves Game"
I know you said not over 25 lines, but this is only slightly over with 29 lines of text, I hope this is acceptable and as captivating as you were looking for.
Written June 7th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie-Contest 2 by naked roots.
300 points, ended September 27, 2006, 4 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options or NO Options, Can you handle it? by IndividualEleven.
1050 points, ended December 8, 2006, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Capture Me With Your Title by Dark Whispers.
421 points, ended September 25, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yoiu are brilliant...Everytime I read a piece of yours I see more talent than I saw before, Cuz....
Keep penning your magic and we will keep reading!!!
AMAZING!!!!!
Lynda
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the titl is an eye catcher and the poem was just a interesting , the meter in the firts stanza was a little of which made it not as smooth as the other stanzas but it was still a beautiful write
Angels send their wishes with the wind
To all those bleeding hearts
For strength and courage
To step out from that broken shadow
Love left in its wake
And seek the afterglow
theis stanza is my fav great write -
Beautiful
Thank you for letting me know which options, very good job ant incorporating two of them, this was fantastic, sad yet beautiful and passionate.
Through tear stained eyes
The never ending story of love
And the pain of its lost reflection
Angels send their wishes with the wind
To all those bleeding hearts
For strength and courage
To step out from that broken shadow
Love left in its wake
And seek the afterglow
Very touching and heart moving, also very nice use of vocabulary, I thank you for entering it was an enjoyable read, twice. -
Outstanding
Very powerful, full of emotion, great imagery, and loved the choice in words and flow was right on. makes you really feel for this piece, great job and good luck -
Awesome
I love your unique idea, I think it's just amazing that something like this you've written can just- be inspired so easily and simply. It is really beautiful- angels shed tears too- that's my fave line out of your entire poem. Good luck in the contest!
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Yes, even angels do cry. I loved this poem the first time I read it too. It conveys such emotion and pulls at my heartstrings. Thank you very much for entering my contest
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Thank you for those kind words amy, I welcome with open arms anyone who wants to read my poetry and provide valuable feedback. I feel that is the only thing that really helps finetune our craft. Again thanks for stopping by, I am pleased you enjoyed the read.
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Oh wow...that was absolutely beautiful... I see why Tink recommended this one, it's absolutely fantastic. Even angels cry... I don't know why those words hit so hard, but the feelings this poem envokes are just...
I don't know how to put words to it. It's wonderful to feel as if something out there cares about our trivial emotions. Love can seem as if it's nothing important, but the loss of it can hurt deeper than anything else in life...
Thanks for sharing this. I'm glad I came across it. Beautiful poem. Sometime I shall have to go through and read more of your poetry. Thanks again for sharing. I very much enjoyed reading this... it painted a beautiful picture in my head. Thank you.
~Amy
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This is so lovely...and the rhythm/flow to it is great. I think you really did a wonderful job with this one. I loved the last 3 lines:
"You have a silent partner sharing your pain
Hiding way above the world
Even angels cry."
wow...
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Oh I loved that line-Angels send their wishes with the wind. Even angels cry was a wonderful poem and used at the end gave a great impact that there is something besides ourselves in the universe. May they always stay at our sides. RobinRae.
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Well I am so glad it birthed itself for us to share. You are a great writer and I am glad I happened upon your work. God Bless, Trina
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very good write hun, I enjoyed the images I got from it.. It is often wondered by many if they really do hear our please and cries. I liked the hope that I hear in this piece, that yes they are there and they do listen.
Many Blessings-
Krystal
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Thank you all for your kind words, I was caught in a moment where I thought "When we hurt do our guardian angels feel the pain?, and what if they truly do?, how special would that be?"
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a great write. I love way you describe the spiritual empathy of the divine. A reminder to us that we never need be alone in our joy or pain. strong use of word choice as well without becoming repetitve.
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thats really good! b-e-a-utiful my friend!!!
"You have a silent partner sharing your pain
Hiding way above the world
Even angels cry."
that part was really touching, aswell as the whole poem. well done, amazing write.
closet
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:) Sweet!
Panther,
This is beautiful. You astound me with this one! I love the flow and the message. I had never thought of this when my heart was in pain, I had never felt as though anyone was sharing the pain with me.
Wonderful.
Tink
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