I see you hide.
Whats with the shame?
What is it
you're not telling me?
Your downcast eyes
and slumped shoulders
tell me somethings wrong.
Its only your mouth
that won't proclaim.
I see it there
behind your lies.
Hiding
In the shadows
of your heart.
These secrets that you keep
You may shield from others
but you'll never hide from me
I've known you for too long, too well
to be decived.
Author notes
hey. i'm sick of people lieing to me. when something is wrong thay think that they should just keep it inside. no. frineds are there to help you through stuff.
Written June 6th, 2006
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I can relate to both sides. It's really frustrating when a friend lies about their problems and refuses to be helped. But I tend to do that a lot- keep things to myself, even if my friends persist for long periods of time. Sometimes, you just have to deal with it on your own, y'know? A nice look on a problem we all can relate to.
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you are brilliant. And your brilliance has yet to come up. awsome!
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I like this because I can relate to about every line. I've seen what you described in many people, and you did a great job at putting it into words.
The only thing I would change is
Hiding
In the shadows
of your heart
Just seems a little cliche to me. Otherwise, great.
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kewl poem i hate it when ppl hide things from me
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Hey, Flaed. This is another poem that I like. I can sense when people are lying to me almost all of the time. I don't even have to look at their faces. I can just tell when they aren't telling me everything. This is a very good poem once again, Flaed. Just know one thing, Flaed. Love is built on trust. If you can't trust someone, it isn't always because of them. Maybe it's because you're not willing to trust them. Maybe you're afraid to trust them. Just a thought. Sometimes, it is because the person isn't telling the truth, but other times, it's because the person being lied to doesn't want to trust them. Okay, thanx for sharing. Keep it up!
Dan -
for the last time there is nothing im not telling you, i could never keep a lie from you, im just kind of quiet latly, but i realy like this poem great job, i love you
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