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Iris

Sweet whispers of the past played a symphony of precious moments in her head as she sat out upon the balcony under the starlit sky.

Dark tacks streaked her face as if she'd been grieving for a death. Perhaps she was; the death of her unending joy in life. All because one person didn't understand.

Kira closed her eyes, and leaned back, letting the cold embrace her instead of the warmth she longed to feel. She would never feel him again; not unless she wanted to risk ruining his life.

Their song, Iris, drowned out the world that night.

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Sharazon is copyrighted to Victoria Of Aragon.
Written June 6th, 2006

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  • Yunaleska gold member
    June 9, 2006
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    wow, such a beautiful piece, Rose. Lovely write.

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    June 7, 2006
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    More like forced into the sacrifice to keep the person doing the forcing from ruining her love's life. Thank you for your comment.

  • Nanette
    June 7, 2006
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    Hmmm...quite an interesting write my friend. This is dark, yet so filled with emotion and wisdom. Its a shame that we sometimes have to sacrifice the things we want for others...guess its the mature thing. Well done.

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    June 6, 2006
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    Perhaps...but maybe that one person who didn't understand just needs to open their mind so that Kira can have another chance with the man she lost.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 6, 2006
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    a lovely piece and nice imagery poor Kira she needs a new man to come strutting into her life love you sweety hugg
    love,]
    Dad

  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    June 6, 2006
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    Thank you.
  • All his
    June 6, 2006
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    i love that song. this was a nicely written piece. great imagery. i can relate the most to this one single line:

    All because one person didn't understand.

    great job!
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