As i stand on the edge of the world
With cuts on my hands
And bruses on my feet
All because he promised me
That my salvation lies
Behind her empty eyes
They will watch me every night
Until the day i die
It's all broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
They mean nothing to me
It's all broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
They mean nothing to me
And never will as long as i live again
For so long i beleved
In something that cannot be real
All the pain that i receved
They don't care how i feel
I sacrifised so much for them
Now i'm taking it back
I refuse to let them win
I just can't do that
It's all broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
They mean nothing to me
It's all broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
They mean nothing to me
And never will as long as i live again
Broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
Broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
Broken crucifixes
And bloody roseries
Author notes
I hope you like this highly contriversal song about what religion has done to me and my family.
Written June 6th, 2006
A contest entry
- What does the cross mean to you? (Religious) by Xox ILY xoX.
525 points, ended January 26, 2007, 18 entries
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What did you think
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Very well written. Would be interesting to hear this put to music.
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Yes, been there myself/good song
Interesting, don't hear much of this traveling the other way type writing, like I lost my faith, and will never believe again. Had such an experience myself. Can identify: thanks for entering the contest: Dave -
Good Job
I too am sorry that you have suffered because of your church. That is never a good thing, when the Rock underneath our feet crumbles. Thanks for entering my contest, good job, and good luck! -
I am sorry you suffered at the hands of your church/religion to the point that you lost your faith. I wish you showed us what happened that caused you such pain. Right now, we can only guess. Lots of Catholics became disillusioned after the sexual abuse crisis. I know I did. But I still love the Lord and am still a Catholic, though not one you accepts everything the higher ups say, for they are only men. Your first verse intrigues me.
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believing does not cause pain but can ease the pain caused by others, too many people intepret the words of the bible in a way that I cannot see is the intention of God, man puts its own spin on it to achieve what he wants, through the ages man has blessed his troops before battle and war cries rage of for God and Country yet every religion has something like thou shalt not kill contained within it's laws, thou shalt not kill unless it is to the benefit of thy government or at the will of its head is not written anywhere.A lot of religions have a tithing where you are expected to pay a proportion of your income to the church, why? where does it say that in the bible, that is a man made policy to get money into the church alledgedly to promote the good works of the lord but it also provides homes and incomes for those teaching it, the essence is do not let religious teachings rule your life as appears to have been the case here, follow the commandments while living your life, you can choose, good luck, Broad
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Wow.
I sense a bit of pain from your tone throughout the entry. If religion has caused your family any trouble, I'm sure it was a trial. Then again I don't know what you've went through so I can't really say much. I could definitely feel the emotion in the entire thing. It kind of made me get a numbing sensation, which made me clam up a little. Great write. -
These express you feelings very well. It is not very lyrical, however. And, it is not what was required. I do not ask people to write stupid phrases in their author's notes to prove they read the rules; I can see that for myself. And, it looks like you did not. I am forced to DQ this on the grounds listed.
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Good
Hmm,Very powerfull. A little repetative,do we need to say it three times?its like sayin someone ran,and ran,and ran, and ran.....and ran.. when it might be smoother to just say it once,you know.Like, she ran endlessly.
Nice poem.keep up the good work.
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