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The Pit

I've felt sorrow so deep
It's like being in a bottomless pit
A hole I found peaceful at time
I would just dwell there and sit

I cry tears, rivers of tear
For friends I have lost
in this God forsaken War
but there still not enough to pay the cost

I've agonized felt paralyzed
when the news of the day came in
The tally just keeps rising
in a war that's now god's sin

One day I'll climb out of this pit i'm in
One day I'll stop crying but it's not today
I'll stop the aganizing about this world we live
And on that day I'll have happy things to say

Author notes

I hope this is dark enough for you, I choose Catagory Five but you should have a Catagory for any kind of Pain
Written June 5th, 2006

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  • June-bug
    July 26, 2006
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    excellent

    this is dark, you express you emotions in every piece of your work, I am so glad you have the inner strength to pull yourself from this pit, I pray this war will soon be finished enough so that all of you can come home. Stay safe.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    June 7, 2006
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    Your name brought me to you. I am not a supporter of this war but feel tremendous admiration for all of you that are over there.
    I was in Vietnam and joined the anti war movement after my return.

    I see this war as engendered by Corporate greed, a delusional idea on the part of the administration that we could turn Iraq into a democratic paradise (neo-con crap) and our 'leader's' attempt to outdo his daddy.
    I would love to open communication with someone who is actually there. To confirm or refute my conceptions.

    Your poem is powerful and compelling, all the more so since you are 'in the cockpit'
    Stay cool friend

    david


  • suseann
    June 7, 2006
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    Have no fear,their star spangled gaze will have to fade soon.Everyone elses have.Keep the faith.This has that same feel as other wars express.I'm sorry anyone is there in harms way.~~Suseann


  • wordplayer
    June 6, 2006
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    great poem I want you to know I feel and understand your pain May God bless you and help you to keep your spirits high Have a good day take care


  • gullionmar
    June 6, 2006
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    WRITTEN VERY WELL OF THE PAIN YOU MUST FEEL,WHEN ONE OF OUROWN DIE.SUCH HORROR ISN'T EAST TO FACE OR TO SPEAK OF.. KEEP UP THE WONDERFUL WRITING


  • June 5, 2006
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    OH I JUST READ YOU ARE IN IRAQ OR WAS??
    WHAT HORROR YOU MUST HAVE SEEN AND FELT..
    YOUR POEM EXPRESSES HINTS OF SUCH..
    THANKS FOR SHARING AND
    GREAT RESPECTS,
    SHATTERED SILENCE

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