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Count your days

Do you think
i will let go of you that easily?
Do you not see
the pain in my eyes?
Remember,your death
is in my hands.
You may start counting your days.

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Written June 5th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • grannyeri gold member
    November 14, 2006
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    Lots of emotions in these lines - sentiments well expressed in this poem - easy to read and understand your feelings here. Liked how you brought the title into that last line.


  • Darksadness
    August 1, 2006
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    a short, strong to the point poem, i like it.


  • July 28, 2006
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    thats really good. it says so much in so little. i really like it.


  • DancingShadowCorpse
    July 20, 2006
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    A threatening promise you have made in this poem. It is short but right to the point in a wonderful way. Well written and great choice of words.

  • coolpoet
    June 7, 2006
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    thanks a lot


  • Sandygram
    June 6, 2006
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    WONDERFUL POEM

    Wow, Short but powerful. I love this poem. I can so relate to it. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy

  • coolpoet
    June 6, 2006
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  • DarkenedAuras
    June 6, 2006
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    Wow short sweet and to the point...reminded me of SAW good luck in my contest....this one is pretty cool coolpoet


  • Mekhala
    June 6, 2006
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    I find this a sad poem . Anyway...thanks for the read. Good luck for the contest!

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