How can this part of nature's life find love
when storms and ravages of time take toll;
when dark and night play havoc from above
so daylight brings but more without the soul?
One cannot find a pear as sweet as thine
without one taste that means so much to you;
without the falling of what's rightly mine
we can't find truth or kindness to renew.
Echo my beating heart with love and might
forever may these thoughts of you remain;
no more to fade in eye's deep endless sight
remembering always the one refrain.
For endless years we will together be
repeating nature's flow for you and me.
Author notes
Have not written a sonnet for a long time. First in many years.
Written June 5th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- an upsurge of points by monkus.
950 points, ended September 13, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme and Flow part 5 Love, romance or sensual - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended July 16, 2008, 55 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended March 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Awwwwh.
Super pretty.
Wonderful sonnet.
Great write, good luck(: -
With every sonnet I read I come to love this form more and more. Love seems to be the dominant theme and you have expressed the love of a life time relationship beautifully
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Love, seems so in tune with the sonnet, whether it be unrequainted, lost or just budding the sonnet seems to capture the essence of it. Your words reflect that essence.
The form was done well, syllable count and line length were adhered to. They rhyme scheme was well developed and the rhythm and flow of it was good.
I encouage you to keep writing to read and comment.
You have been chosen to proceed to the next round. Once the next round contest is up you will receive a link to that contest.
God Bless
Tammy -
Very nice to see a sonnet from you and lovely to see you picking up an HM
Thanks for the entry and please keep coming back in the later rounds
Jeff and Sue
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A beautiful sonnet grannyeri, trying to go back to everyone poetry that I have loved! Wonderful to find this lovely write! You have done so well with your writes. Yours a sure winner!! Vickie
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Strong sense of movement, rhythm and rhyme (with one question: is "renew" intended to rhyme with "me"?) In general you demonstrate a solid grasp of form, structure, and idiom.
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I am not usually a fan of sonnets, but I like this It's a really nice piece of writing. Well done and thank you for entering x
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I do so love a sonnet for love. I think there can be nothing better...thank you so much for your entry.
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I have to say sonnetts dont completely sit right with me because i dont quite understand them and they aer a very different style to what i write, but i understand that this is about love, a love that can not be surpassed, i also see that you rely on nature as a comparison to your love, is that the point of a sonnet?
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But a very nicely done sonnet it was. Good write.
Jim
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