Come with me, into the night.
We will dance our lives away together,
We can chase the clouds and fall on hills.
Come with me, into the night.
Come with me, on this sunny day.
We can smell the sun and pick daffodils.
We can enjoy the sweet sunset forever.
Come with me on this sunny day.
Come with me, on this one full moon.
We can catch the stars in our hands.
I will sing for you, a song of love.
Come with me, on this one full moon.
Come with me, on this hot, summer day,
We can discover all the new lands.
We can play in the pool and watch clouds above.
Come with me, on this hot, summer day.
Come with me, I don't care when.
As long as you're by my side.
We can love and grow in every way.
Come away with me.
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Written June 4th, 2006
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haha you have a mod fan!! *grabs your hand* how 'bout you
Come with me, on this cool, winter night.
We can wait for santa to come.
We can lay on the grass and watch the stars fall.
Come with me, on this cool, winter night
hehe that would be fun...i love you claire!!!!!
*hugs*
-Anthony, the still forgiven one even though she doesnt act like it anymore
oh wait...im supposed to comment your poem...its sweet...i don't truly like poems that don't rhyme and flow amazingly...but it was sweet
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How sweet and loving. I really enjoyed this. We all are waiting for someone to come with us on are journey through life. So wonderfully done. Nice flow and rythnm.
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Another good job as usual, Claire. I like the dreamy, fantasy sort of feel it has.
Just a couple of thoughts. In stanza two you mention the sunny day, then the sunset in the next line, then the sun again in the next
Only other thought would be on the progression. Night, sunny day, moon, summer day. But, maybe that works. Night - day - night - day. Yeah, good job afterall.
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Oh, this is sooo sweet and beautiful, i agree i love that part too "Come with me, on this one full moon. We can catch stars in our hands." Stunning phrase of an amazing writer
I love the moon and stars, everything of nighttime. Its the best!~RynnPuddle -
ooh, a love like this. Truly amazing. But still, I loved this part.
Come with me, on this one full moon.
We can catch the stars in our hands.
I will sing for you, a song of love.
Come with me, on this one full moon.
Maybe just because I love the nights sky, but this just stuck out to me. I loved it. Great job hun. -
i'd like to come away with you
lol, just kidding!
it's a very cute little thing you've written here. i love it! it's so very sweet. all of nature's wonders, they'r all in here.
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