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And Yet Beautiful

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photo by QT Luong/terragalleria.com</a>, all rights reserved.

Thank you Tuan for allowing me to use this!  This picture is NOT to be copied or used without written permission from the photo owner at the above link.





It settles
like a thick blanket
over my very being;
sadness
grief, loneliness.

Stifling out my
very
breath;
rolling in and
covering
all...

~ And yet beautiful~

Beneath it
I
quiver.

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  • Endeavor gold member
    December 2, 2006

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    Very Good

    The poem begain Very good and improved further with the last few words

    covering
    all...

    ~ And yet beautiful~

    Beneath it
    I
    quiver.


    Very nice

    Rick


  • Puppydog gold member
    June 12, 2006
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    VERY BEAUTIFUL

    You give one a very soft and gentle feeling in their heart with your wonderful words.


  • eternalpoet
    June 10, 2006
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    5 Stars *****

    Wow, this is amazing... truely amazing poem... i have missed alot of your work, i think...but i think its never too late..

    i have no words, sometimes people think that i am happy, but i might not be really that happy.. i could relate to this poem.. excellent

    wonderful photography..too

    take cares and have anice time my dear friend.. just keep it up.. your humble little friend... ... ... .. - vic ( who else? )


  • raggyann
    June 7, 2006
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    great picture
    and great poem


  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    June 7, 2006
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    You Rock!

    Melissa, WOW! What an expression of sensitivity, vulnerability and yet reserved strength. Your eye for the aesthetics even in the realm of danger is admirable. I really like this poem/picture package. You Rock! Dennis


  • Forms of Me
    June 7, 2006
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    Melissa, Dear this is beautiful and sooo moving. Your words have captured the picture beautifully, but there is such a sadness here. God Bless you lovely one...God is with us..and He gives us beauty in all things if we can only see it.

    Liz

  • Forms of Me
    June 7, 2006
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    Melissa, Dear this is beautiful and sooo moving. Your words have captured the picture beautifully, but there is such a sadness here. God Bless you lovely one...God is with us..and He gives us beauty in all things if we can only see it.

    Liz


  • Mamabekaboo
    June 7, 2006
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    A wonderful picture and a wonderful write. Whoever did the picture also did an excellent job.
    Because He Lives,
    Beka


  • Sharcu silver member
    June 5, 2006
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    Awesome job, Melissa! This is absolutely wonderful! Has the artist gotten a chance to see it? I know, as an artist myself, that I love seeing the art that other people create from what I do. Very nicely done! Keep it up!
    --Tim


  • pattyann4500
    June 5, 2006
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    Melissa, Dear, this is lovely, and the picture is a breathtaking scene that reminds me of where we used to live. The fog would lie in the mountains just like this, and it was a pleasure just to look out our window at it. A beautiful poem! Hugs, Ma


  • noble1
    June 5, 2006
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    What wonderful imagery you have shown us in this perfect little piece. Even without the picture I could feel it enveloping me! Thanks for sharing this dear sister! God bless you! Noble1


  • ma belle
    June 5, 2006
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    beautiful

    O Molassis, this is a gem! I like the abstractness and mystic of this write--I think it is one of my favorites of yours. P.S. Are you a first-time grandmother?!? Congrats on the baby! Hugs and luv, Belle


  • Theater Of Dreams
    June 5, 2006
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    Outstanding.

    Hi! beautifully done. Isn't it great you found a pic to relay a visual impact on already precious words? Looks like Yosemite.
    Just wonderful M'Lady!


    ♥

    Love;
    James.


  • Frogzter gold member
    June 4, 2006
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    Oh sis.... such beautiful yet poignant words to go along with an outstanding pic! You always touch me with your words because I know where you are coming from! I hope all is well!
    Many blessings and hugz
    ~Sis


  • Molassis
    June 4, 2006
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    it's because on the 'other' side of sadness, grief and loneliness.. comes beauty... kinda like the rainbow after the rain? Just seeing ahead is all... LOL.. how you doin?


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    June 4, 2006
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    A third "well done"

    An interesting idea - sadness, grief and lonliness being "yet beautiful." But, beneath that heavy blank I can understand the quivering. Well done, Melissa. Really causes me to stop and think and ponder. Yep, well done.

    Paul

  • mordauk
    June 4, 2006
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    Very beautifully done and with few words, making it all the more beautiful. The picture truly adds to the piece as well, though it is not needed.

  • Eternally Glass
    June 4, 2006
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    I have to say it was short but sweet. You do an excellent job of capturing the beauty under the darkness and vice versa.


  • Ldkjfsalfhi
    June 4, 2006
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    good job man

    i love how its sort adn to the point. very nive


  • nobodys looking
    June 4, 2006
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    Gret job. I liked the imagery you used. Your very skilled with it. This flows really well. Very easy to relate to. I think your a very good writer. Great job. Keep writing!


  • Tainted Innocence
    June 4, 2006
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    Lovely sentiments you've written in this piece. And that picture is amazing! But it only compliments the words you have written :-) You did a truly wonderful job.


  • Sidra Sabella
    June 4, 2006
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    amazing

    this tear glitters,
    and brings out the blue in my eyes,
    flushed with sorrow,
    i fel more alive than ever,
    and i smile,
    becuase i can feel the release,
    as my heart silently breaks,
    and it took pain,
    to show me the purest pleasure in life.

    this brings alot of thought and i think you wrote it very well.

    ~miss sidra sibella


  • tryst 1
    June 4, 2006
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    i know the feeling exactly...melancholy, yet bittersweet....

    you have managed to convey the spare, stark emotions and create a misty atmopshere in this short poem.

    well done
    ~tryst


  • ShelleyA gold member
    June 4, 2006
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    Hi Melissa. Even without the picture this is a wonderful write. Heartfelt. Beautiful imagery, flow and metaphor. Lovely expression of feeling. Masterful. Well crafted and a much enjoyed read. An outstanding piece, dear sister. Thanks so much for sharing it. Shelley

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