It was that night of INSANITY,
We were planning to leave,
And suddenly after we left,
I couldn't get back there.. EVER.
Why does TIME have to pass?
Why can't it stay the same?
So many memories GONE by a second!
Thirteen years of life,
Gone by just thirteen seconds!
Why does this happen?
Is it necessary for all of us to let time go?
Or should we make use of it?
I miss those days so much that sometimes I feel I was wrong to be a part of that decision.
We all have hopes.
Mine is to get back there soon.
Author notes
Hello readers,
This poem means when I was shifting I couldn't go back because that wasn't my house anymore. There is a hope in all of us for something. Mine is to go back to my old house. That is why this short poem says it all!
I am just 13 but I have so many feelings for my old house. Everybody reading this poem must be knowing how it feels.
Written June 4th, 2006
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Awww....!
Hey.. I really don't know what to comment! I am just out of words after this gr8 piece.. it really made me CRY!
Anyway, its just a WONDERFUL poem and I'm waiting for more from my biggie sis! 
Hmmm.. and I'm in LURVVVV with these lines-
We all have hopes.
Mine is to get back there soon.
I know we will go back there very very soon!
Lots of Love,
Nida -
Bravo!
WOW!!! Very nice and written in a way only u could...really really good ...ur emotions are so sincere and heartfelt...i adored ur work...keep up the good work...best of luck for the contest...Love, Shuvi -
good poem herre. I actually think that this has potential to be more here. I have said this many times when commenting on poetry...we as writers and poets use words to portray something more. When reading a great poem, we need to see that picture that sits behind the words... almost there my friend, keep writing, and good luck inthe contest!!!
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Wonderful written. Very strong and full of deep emotions. Our lives do change often, before we realize it and sometimes not as we wish. I have learned if you relax it normally all works out for the best.
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great
this is a great write & i wish you the very best of luck in my contest.
--Blessed be--
Bradhadair -
hey hun.....this is a very nice poem......usually im not into the non-rhyming poems.....but i really liked this one.....i could relate to it a lot....since i often ask myself similar questions....well keep up the good work
your doing great!!...btw thx for commenting on my poem
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I enjoyed your free verse.
It's crazy how time seems to be able to take from us.
A well written piece. I think everyone can relate to something like this. Wanting to go back to a time when they felt content is something everyone wishes for I think, even if they didn't appreciate it all that much at the time.
Shelly -
Hmmm... It was a pretty good poem, but osmething aout it I just don't like... I like how you went free verse too, mostp eople try to rhyme in poems and I personally like rhyming better, but this is a good poem regardless for the lack of rhyming. Good Luck in my contest
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option number please...great poem, thanks for entering and good luck!
<3 always,
K-Jo -
very nice write princess. i really liked this because i know exactly how it feels to shift into a new house and leave all the memories attached to the old one. i been shifted around too often and i share your passion to someday go back to all those houses i lived in in the past. really good write. keep penning.
lotsa luv
bubba
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yes it indeed does happen that when u leave a place where u have lived a long time ..the memories of the place haunt u ..tempt u to go back but u cant cos that place is not anymore urs! very beautifully expressed ! way to go!
keep it up!
preets
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excellent
What an open and honest peom. I think you did a good job of expressing your feelings Keep up the great work!
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i love dis poem..!!!hehehehe...
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hey! im k wat about u gal...how u doin?....hey tnkx for letting meh know about ur new poem...its really good n in a long time ive read one like this...but hey when it comes to making decisions you should think carefully about it....n when a decision is made sumtimes we can not change it.....but hey nice poem buhbye
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Very nice; quite nostalgic.
Thanks for informing me and sharing it.
Brian
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