Karen came home from work with a car full of food
She came through the door and found her husband Joe, in the nude
She was just five or seven minutes late
Joe was in a bad mood and angry, he just couldn’t wait
He took the packages from her tiny and fragile hands
Threw them on the floor and in the garbage can
He screamed at her for not being on time
He picked her up by the neck and spat in her eye
Angrily he pulled her by the hair to the bed
He promised her that soon, she would be dead
Her children were screaming at the top of their lungs
He ran up to them and made them bite their tongues
The were all in pain as their mouths bled on the floor
And all he could think about, was to hurt them even more
So Joe took Karen and threw her against the wall
And angrily raped her until she couldn’t breathe at all
The children screamed “DADDY PLEASE STOP, OR SHE IS GOING TO DIE!”
As tears fell down from their little brown eyes
Without remorse, he laughed and cursed
And what he did next was horribly worse
He shoved his hand far up her dress
She screamed for hours, as he raped her and sucked her breasts
He soon climaxed as she collapsed on the floor
She could feel the blood gushing out, she was beaten and torn
Joe watched his wife Karen, as she began to fall asleep
He evilly smiled as he kicked at her feet
Although the pain was excruciating, she played dead on the floor
She waited patiently until he dressed and walked out the door
As the door slammed shut, Karen cried out for her kids
They fearfully ran to her from the closet where they hid
Her oldest daughter Sally sat her up on the floor
She gently hugged her mother and kissed her every sore
Her son Jack and other daughter Amanda ran to call the police
They told the officer what had happened and screamed, “HURRY PLEASE!”
The police came minutes later and found the family on the floor
And just as they entered the house, Joe arrived at the door
They all screamed, “That is the monster that beat our mother half to death”
As they surrounded Joe and arrested him, they all took a deep breath
They knew that they were safe now but, Karen was losing a lot of blood
A paramedic came to check on her, he promised to do all he could
He and another police officer placed Karen gently on a bed
Gave her some medication and put an oxygen mask over her head
A policeman grabbed her children and put them all in his car
They followed the ambulance to the hospital which wasn’t very far
As their mother lay silently asleep, a doctor came in the room
She smiled at Karen and told her, “Don’t worry, we’ll take care of you”
Her children held hands in a circle and said a prayer to the Lord above
To give their mother the strength and help her rise above
They all lay down beside her, holding her against their hearts
They then promised each other that they would never be apart
Karen, Sally, Jack, and Amanda are still alive and doing well
Joe recently died while in prison, he hung himself in his cell
Author notes
This is a true story about a family that I know. It took me a while to put their story into words. I started writing this last year and just finished it today. Karen and I once took a walk together at a park. That was the day that she broke down and shared her life's story with me. The kids are all grown up now and are doing fine.
Many of my friends and I still keep in contact with Karen. She is a wonderful mother and today she is a totally different person, than she was years ago. She still has reservations and fears when she meets other men. Slowly but surely though, she is coming around. Karen just recently started dating again last year. She seems happy, but we all know that deep down she is still hurting.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read this.
Written June 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- Forced Loss Of Innocence by DRUNKENxXxBABiiD0LL.
335 points, ended April 13, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - pain by XxTWLOHAxx.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 51 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shaking in Dispair by skydancer0110.
450 points, ended June 22, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - child abuse....... mental ,phsyical ,or any kind by trace3grls.
450 points, ended June 21, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Give Me All Your Gold~ by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended July 26, 2007, 49 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ABUSE - looking for poems to be published :) by DramaQueen469.
550 points, ended October 25, 2008, 58 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of the Best!! by DramaQueen469.
2000 points, ended June 8, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Because of you I am afraid. (Another sexual abuse contest) by AshleyAesthetic.
400 points, ended June 21, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abuse and fear. by WednesdayJade.
1250 points, ended August 5, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Abuse Hurts by Diminished Capacity.
1000 points, ended July 25, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - RAPED by FreeFalling911.
1100 points, ended October 16, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!
Comments
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This is seriously amazing. There is so much emotion filled inside of it. I can really relate to this. Thank you for sharing.
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WOW HOLY CRAP!!!! That's all I can really say to this... uhh.. I'm speechless. This was an interesting story and to find out that it's true is even better. I hope Karen and her kids are still doing well! Poetically, however, I think you could work on the flow. I think the only thing that makes this poem GREAT is the story, which is awesome, but it would also be awesome if it was a bit more... poetic, I guess. Thank you for entering my contest.
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This is a very sad story, one that has brought me to tears. I not only felt for karen, but for the children that were forced to watch. Abuse, people don't realize how many it affects. You did a wonderful job, it was almost as if I was in the room watching this take place. Thank you so much for sharing this with me and for entering it in my contest.
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sad tale of reallity.
a brave write.
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This mother is very lucky to have you and such loving children. Im glad you added at the end, that they are alive and doing much better, this sickened me to no end. The poor corrupted children...
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This is a good write, though I asked specifically for free-verse and prose only. Better luck next time
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I've read this before... and it's still just as heartbreaking, and deserving of every trophy
Thankyou so much for entering, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Maria
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Beautiful powerful write. This was breath taking and heartwrenchingly painful to read. Thank you for following the rules, i really enjoyed reading this piece. I wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece.
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This is why I own guns Jeremy why do men not understand? This is why I own knives . why do men not understand? Sometimes the lines get blurred . Women want to believe they just want to believe.Special circumstances maybe sometimes, but you still get just as broken bleed just as much.
I love how you love people and write the truth so beautifully.
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abuse is a hard subject to talk about, write about..its important to hear of other people's stories. I'm glad that your friend made it, I am truly glad for that.. it affects people for years, that's part of the abuse. something so horrific as that, leaves scars and they run deep.. they don't always go away and even time doesn't heal everything. I can understand the reservations that she has when she meets new men. it may lessen some more, but honestly it doesn't truly ever go away. I speak from experience on that one..
the important thing is that she and her children survived this experience.
I'm really glad that you told us about this. often its hard to write about this as I mention before. it helps to get it out.
Congratulations on all of the Gold Trophies & the HM. You deserved it ..
kat
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Wonderful write and congrats on the gold! You deserved it! I'm glad your friend has put this behind her. And what a wonderful friend you must be to for her to be able pour her heart out to you. I'm sure it wasn't easy for her to trust anyone after this.
Hugs!
Cayla
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Such a sad story, it broke my heart to read it. A beautifully written piece as well.
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WOW. I can see why this has so many trophies... what an utterly heartbreaking story. I am so glad that this family are now doing okay. You have done so well to write thei tale so beautifully. Thankyou very much for entering this piece.
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This was the longest entry in the contest, and when I saw 69 lines, I thought for sure you would lose my interest, but this was so well written that you only captured my interest more and more. Great job, you deserved all of those trophys.
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Heartwrenching write Jeremy, so glad that Karen survived and overcame the demons from her past. This captures the reader and completely breaks the heart into.
Blessings,
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Very well done J-man, a very touching story indeed. Well worthy of all the shineys it has garnered. Best of luck...Scott
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wow this is very very sad......
i only wished that i could write as good as u!!!
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wow. I cannot believe how well written this is. I actually sat here biting my tongue feeling sad for the woman and became more and more angry at this man. I really felt it.
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Wow good write and congrats on all the trophys good luck in this contest
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Congratulations on winning all tose trophys. This was a quite the painful and emotional poem to read, and very heart-breaking. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.
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omgosh.. this is seems so fake yet it happens... why would someone want to do something like this... how dumb can ppl be these days... its awful.. but awesome job!
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you added this to a competition then i went to show someone and it was removed is there a reason......
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Oh my....Oh my word. My heart is thudding and aching after reading that. It was amazing...but at the same time, I hate the subject of this poem...I hate it so much. But congratulations on all your golds for this poem, it's certainly heartbreaking and painful to read. Well done
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this is a great write well done, i have placed this gold in my last comp do you have any others... this one will stay in the comp but im wondering if u have any other
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Such a stong emotioal poem/story. It is so well written I felt like I was there(which wasn't nice).This touched me deeply. Well done you & well done Karen for being a good mother to her children.
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this is a great write.... i myself gave it gold put i was wondering do u have any others like this or along the same line......
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wow this is amazing!! thanks for entering my contest you are touch competion!! i love it!!
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thanks for your comments on the poems i was just wondering what your opion was thats all,..... thankyou
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this is so terribly sad..im still crying as i write this.
that poor family...no one would wish this kinda thing on anyone...im soso sorry for what your friend and her family went through... but im proud of her for getting herself and children safe and never going back to that mongrel, he got off lightly if you ask me(hanging yourself is the easy way out)
but in saying all that now iv stopped crying , i want you to no that this was well written for such a devastating story...
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i would like for you if ok.. could you read through the finalists and give me your opion if ok....
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very sad situation for karen to have to go through, but even worse for the children, glad they all survived it, though I'm sure they all wear scars that will never fade. you penned it very well, nice rhythm and rhyme, good luck in the contest
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this is such a great write.... i went through similiar things but i was the one who put my dad in jail...
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this was a brilliant write and i thankyou.... my children went through similiar circumstances. i hope your friend can recover... thankyou for entering...
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so so sad baby.
god i cant even imagine that. im happy she was able to move on in the best way she could.
thank you for telling this. and good luck
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i honestly wonder why i read these. i have picked through each and every one of the poems in this contest, and not one of them hasnt failed to make me mad. good poem.
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I'm really not sure what to say. Except this was AMAZING! This really touched me. It's a very heavy and sad write. You wrote it very well. The fact that it is actually a TRUE story just wow...I'm not sure what to say. I mean I thought I had it bad but that's even worse. Great job! Good luck!
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Hello Zombie! Thank you very much for the Gold on my poem "Karen"! I appreciate it and am glad that you enjoyed it.
Jeremy0826
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jeremy, as much as i hate to do this, i have to disqualify this. i am looking for uplifting writes. like what good things have karen and her kids done. honestly, i almost threw up because my ex is in prison and should anything happen to him, no matter what, i would never live with myself. i need stuff to focus on where i can go and what i have to look forward to. sorry. viyanna rosemarie
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So sad...
My first thought was wow, intense. Such a horrid event no one should have to experience. Then I read that it was a true story and was mortified. I can't believe there are men like that out there. I was glad to read the last line, though he deserved torture. I'm glad Karen is healing, she's a strong person to make it through such a terrefying event. Seems you finally found a way to put the story into art. -
wow, this is very deep and so very sad. this did make me cry, it reminded me of my mother and her ex. Its very very good. Thank you so much for entering my contest. Good Luck.
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Wow that this story is true and that you was able to captivate your friend story is quite remarkable...my wishes go out to the family that there lives should never be shattered again...Thanks for entering my contest Much Love, Raneika
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Wow... this is an amazing write. That is so awful! My sympathies to your friend Karen. Thank you for your wonderful entry, and good luck in my contest.
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Please read the rules, I didn't have many. It must be over 75 lines, not including spaces.
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this was a very sad, emotional and powerful write...there was alot of painin this..no one should ever or deserves to be abused...keep writting your very talented
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Thank you so much!
Thank you so much Tasha! I appreciate your comments and thank you for taking the time to read this piece. Take care my friend!
Jeremy0826
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the context of your story is so heart breaking that it brought tears to my eyes. And now to learn this was true is devastating. I am really sorry for your friend. And as bad as it sounds, it seems like o' joe got just what he deserved... He had to face God and face what he had done. I hope that somehow Karen is able to put this behind her the best she can and find a love that will love her and be good to her the way she deserves. Thank you for sharing this story with us.
Many blessings,
Tammy
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This is a beautiful write... I mean beautiful as in beautifully put, not as in the scenes. Your writing is so very special and paints a picture that many are frightened to share or show... Well done, I can see you worked hard on this and it shows.
I also know some people who have been through traumatic situations like this. God bless Karen, Jack, Sally and Amanda for there struggles and for managing to stay on the good side of life and to stay strong for each other. You know what they always say what comes around goes around, I believe that and that happened with Joe. As I have previously posted those types hate themselves more than anyone... Thus, that is why he killed himself.
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Hey Suffering! Thanks a lot for your comments and feedback on this write. I appreciate it!
Jeremy -
Such a powerful and sad and disturbing piece! I am so glad you wrote it, and showed it to us all. Thank you so much for sharing this story with us all...it means a lot. Keep safe!
SufferingFool
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Hello again Janet! With every comment on this write, I send it along to Karen. She is doing very well now and I thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this one. I appreciate the applause also. Domestic Violence is such a horrid thing. I hope that you and the ones that you love have never experienced this and never will. Take care and thank you again!
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Its not often that I'm lost for words but............. You did such an amazing job with this. What a monster, how do people get over something like this. Sadly there are many Karen's. What happens in someones life to make them want to hurt people like this. Its hard to imagine a life where the sound of the keys in the door fill you with fear. Thank you for writing this and fighting the fight against domestic violence. x
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Good poem, Allen, though a sad story, I think it had a happy ending. Joe got as he deserved, in all ways... Just one thing I react to in your poem, is the line "She soon climaxed and collapsed on the floor". She was raped, and she climaxed? Maybe you should rephrase that line? In example, you can say He soon climaxed... Other than that, it was a good poem. Thank yo for sharing this with us, and I wish you best of luck in the contest! Jim
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Hello Lost! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this. I appreciate it.
Jeremy -
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Good I am glad the bastard killed himself.He did not deserve to live anyhow.This was an amazing write.You have brung tears to my eyes once again.Great job love.
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Angel, thank you so much for reading and commenting on "Karen". I appreciate your applause also. Have a great day!
Allen0826 -
sad and emotional write
Oh my lord, this poor woman.
It is disgusting to read some of the horrible things that happen to the nicest people.
If this was just a fiction write, I would be saying how the use of words were fantastic, the emotions were flying high in all the right spots. It is written so well you feel the pain Karen went through and her children's agony.
But it is real.....
I really feel for Karen and her children, and although I don't believe in speaking badly of the dead, I have to say
I am glad that guy IS dead....
I think that you have written this brillantly.
You are a great friend.
Stay safe
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Debbie thank you so much for reading and commenting on this write. I just spoke to Karen today and she says that she is doing fine. I also relayed all of the comments and support from everybody else who gave their heartfelt concerns on here. She is grateful! Thank you very much for your applause also! I appreciate it.
Jeremy
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OH MY GOSH!...my heart broke when I read this. What a aweful thing to have happened. I'm glad she is doing fine. My heart even goes out to the kids too even though there grown...to have gone through all this.
You did a wonderful job in this write....such a powerful image!
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Thank you Curtkf! I appreciate your comments on this write.
Jeremy -
Great write
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Thank you for your comments and applause!
I appreciate it.
Jeremy -
awesome
omg omg THIS WAS A SAD WRITE. As usual you wrote well and gave great detail. my god i cant stop crying. I love you for writing this for her. the pain we go through is hard to get over....im speechless. thanks for sharing her story maybe it will open up some eyes.
bless you babe.
Victoria
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Stephanie thank you for your comments on this piece!
I appreciate it.
Allen0826 -
Thank you Mors for your comments on this piece!
Allen0826 -
Thank you for your comments on this piece!
Allen0826 -
Jodygirl, thank you for your comments and for taking the time to read this!
Allen0826 -
Ishtar, thank you for your comments and for taking the time to read this piece.
Allen0826 -
Bunny, it's always a great pleasure to get a comment from you and to read your work. Thanks a lot for taking the time to read this. I appreciate it!
Jeremy -
What a very horrible thing to have happned to this woman and her family, I am so glad to hear that she is doing better, for I know it is a very long hard road to travel after something like this, my heart and prayers go out to her! This piece is well written with excellent flow. I loved it, the rhyme is good, there are a couple of lines that need to be reworked
and one word that I would not have used is "climaxed", for this denotes that it was somehow pleasurable for her and obviously in this situation it would be the last thing that she would find any such pleasure in. maybe use "she was exhausted and soon collapsed on the floor". Keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny
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I must say, this is so heart wrenching.
How sad to actually know a family that this has happened to. I mean, we hear about it all the time but we've never really come across it. At least I haven't.
The content of the poem is excellent. You're able to evoke the emotions in the reader. However, there are part that are a bit long, choppy, and tedious. They break the meter, and take a reader off track. So, you get into the mood of it, but then you're broken off. Maybe if you broke sentences up or added some commas, it would read much better.
Nicely done.
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This is a great write. I know many women who have had to live this kind of life, but it never fails to bring the tears to my eyes when I read something like this. What a great tribute to Karen and her children to know how much you care for them. Lets hope they have all have come to terms with all that has happened to them. God grant them peace.
Joan -
i too, read this poem holding my breath, racing on to the next stanza....dear god, what a horrible situation. i know it is common, but that never lessens the horror...
i'm so glad that this story had a happy ending.
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FUCKING INCREDIBLE
I thought she was gonna die at the end of the poem, but I wasn't quite sure because you pulled this off so well. I kept reading faster and faster with every stanza (and I'm a pretty fast reader to begin with, keep in mind). This is one of the best poems I have ever read...I wasn't expecting anything like this when I clicked on it, though. To be honest, the only reason I clicked on it was because I have a friend called Karen. [laughs] I just thought to myself, Hey, small world. I wonder what this is about...
Well anyway, the only critical thing I can say about this is the rhythm was sometimes a bit choppy. Example:
The children screamed “DADDY PLEASE STOP, OR SHE IS GOING TO DIE!”
As tears fell down from their little brown eyes
Without remorse, he laughed and cursed
And what he did next was horribly worse
The first two lines go together great, but they don't fit with the last two, as far as length goes.
....Other than that, this was an amazing piece. Keep writing.
MORSMORDRE!
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Excellent
Wow!! I am speechless. Poor Karen and those kids I can't even imagine their terror, fear, Pain. That is one strong woman! It is wonderful that the family stood together like that and that Joe is out of their lives. It proved true as usual that all abusers are cowards. Joe took the easy way out in my opinion but at least none of them have to fear him anymore. Thank you so much for sharing this poem with all of us. Wonderful job putting their story into words. God bless, ~Stephanie~ -
oh my god, this was terrible to read, but in a good way, ppl need to be warned about monsters like 'Joe', i wouldnt know what this is like, but it doesnt seem very nice of a thing to happen...
Great write
keep up the good work
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wow what a heart wrenching story,you've told it very well with great detail, god bless karen and give her his blessing and the happiness she so deserves, glad to hear tat all of te kids are fine they were truly brave little souls god bless you and keep up the great writing
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I don't know where to start. What a horrible experience to go through. Just for being late? That's not really what it's about. What it is about is power and control. How horribkle for the children to have to witness this. I am glad he got what he deserves. I am glad to hear that your friend Karen is okay now. She can start to live her life again. Please send my good wishes to your friend Karen. God bless her and be safe. She has many scars. She will need your help as a friend to see her through. We have something in common, I have a friend named Karen too.
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Thank you Shadow!
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this is written well and tells a very sad story very clearly. i'm glad that they managed to escape this situration and that he got punished rather than getting away with such awful actions. you wrote this vewry powerfully
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Thank you Jokerman!
Allen0826 -
I understand the way that you feel. Believe me, it was so difficult just thinking and writing this. Thank you for taking the time to read this and for your comments. Take care! "Huggles" to you too! lol
Allen0826 -
GOOD STUFF
left me feeling sick to the stomach.great piece of writing.Men who hit and rape women are the lowest kind of low life.this piece speaks up about something which is much more common than most of us would ever imagine.great piece. -
I have such a hard time reading stuff on abuse but I realise that it does help people out there to hear the story of others. So in that thanks for sharing this and my heart goes out to this familly. I am glad she is doing better and moving on with her life.
huggles
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What a truly sad, sad write! Abuse of any kind needs to be wiped off the face of the Earth; I just don't understand it!
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You're very welcome and thank you very much too!
Allen0826 -
this was so violent, and just so sad. gosh... i'm speechless. this is a horrific story, and it hurts even more to know that this is true. These people do not deserve to live. I can't even imagine what would drive someone t odo things as horrible as this. i just don't understand. But i am glad that she allowed someone to enter her life again. yet, i'm afraid that she might still feel pain inside, for it i snot easy to get rid of these scars. they are with you for life.
thank you for sharing this story with us. i am deeply touched. the words are quite strong...and the story itself...
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Hello Di! I couldn't agree with you more. It's very unfortunate that people act in such a manner as this. I am sorry that you too had to endure this kind of pain throughout your life. I wish you the best! Thank you for reading and commenting on this piece.
Allen0826 -
Hi, there is so much violence around maybe there was before but was not brought the the publics attention,sad world we live in,every day here on ap I read about abuse, it is frightening the ammount of violence there is in our soceity,I was abused by both mother and husband so I know what it is about only too well, a good write, all the best, Di
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Don't worry about it!
Take care.
Allen0826 -
God.. I'm so sorry, I read it twice and saw that. My humblest apologies.. I am very tired. And shaky..
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If you read the line again, "Karen came home with a car full of food" is what I wrote, not blood. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Allen0826 -
Karen came home from work with a car full of food
She came through the door and found her husband Joe, in the nude
I have to admit, I don't understand those lines.. a car full of blood? Do you mean the children..? Sorry, I am being thick I know.
I really liked this, it is written quite factually, almost like an autopsy..
Best of luck in this contest, and thankyou for sharing the story..
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Jeremy I am so sorry to say....I am glad that Joe hung himself. What a horrible, tragic situation Karen was in. I am glad her and the kids are doing well. She will probably always hold on to some of the hurt though. It was very good of you to write about her story. I hope that others will read it and learn that noone is invincible to the horrors of evil people. I could go on but I will stop now. The piece sparks alot of emotion. I will pray for her and the kids. Love Ya, Trina.
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omg! What a horrible situation to be in, life is fragile enough, but this was so so sad, Lets hope she finds love, peace of mind and perhaps some day trust as she should blessed with,thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest..Linda
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