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Autumn Leaf

A leaf,
frail and brittle,
glides to the algid earth
glossing it, with a fiery hue.
Lending
it's warming tones
to nature's numbing pallet,
struggling against winter's glacial
embrace.

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Written June 4th, 2006

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  • June 12, 2006
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    decent

    a little ...off
    But for the life of me I can't figure out WHAT about it is off...I LOVE the imagery... but just... ehhh...
    execution... something with the execution.. like your structure and your style didn't quite mesh.. choppy in places I think... something like that. >.>
    >_<
    wish I could be alittle more definitive...

    oh and---
    algid = ORGASMIC. ^_^ Thank you, it's my new favorite word.
    Edited on Jun 12, 4:51 p.m. because ''.