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death

Little Shawn smokes six Ax's a day.
He started smoking when he was three.
Now he's burried under the willow tree.

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Written June 3rd, 2006

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  • XxBi-BeautyxX
    December 8, 2007
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    Its good but you should add on to it.

  • January 19, 2007

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    brilliant!

    Reminiscent of Dylan Thomas' later, drunken slobber period but with the minimalism of William Carlos Williams.


  • January 19, 2007
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    you are shawn hornbeck

  • La Tua Cantante
    January 16, 2007
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    Really... not. that. funny. but, okay.

  • Vickie J
    June 3, 2006
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    lol-he's pretty talented to be able to strike a match at three. Seeing you are new to the site, I want to extend a warm welcome vj
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