If you are unable
to open your heart completely,
taking a chance
of having it broken,
Can you ever really love another?
And if you do get hurt,
a thousand times over,
isn't all the pain
worth just one second
in the arms
of someone who
truly loves you?
Author notes
Written June 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Shorter The Better! by My Darkness.
400 points, ended July 4, 2007, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Very sweet and meaningful. And very very true.
I love the background, too. Very appropriate.
Congratulations on winning gold!
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Thank you!
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WOW.. this really spoke to me, exceptionally written, i am a fan... thanks for entering and good luck
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this was o very beautiful, true and sad. It sort of remembers me my life. I LOVED it, it was so great, also lyrically, from the flow and expressions and all!
Sineana
PS: Thank you for your comment on "Schenga"!
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I agree with your comment! If you never take a chance, you'll never know. Thanks for the nice comment and good luck to you also with judging!
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very true very true what really annoys me is when people really like someone but won't tell them incase they get hurt.. but if you never try then you're never gona love someone! good one, best of luck
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awesome write!!! I loved it!! _AmberLeigh_
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Thanks for the great comment!
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LOL...Thank you! I had to really think to make it work. But I guess in the end, it said what I wanted it to. Thanks again for the great comment!
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Thank you for the nice comment!
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WOW!
WHAM! This poem NAILED exactly what I was feeling right now! Incredible! Good luck in the contest! I think you're going to do great!
-Tim -
incredible
Wow... This is really amazing. And so very true... Gawd I wish I was the one to come up with that. Geez... I love this poem. Please keep writing!
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Very true!! Nicely done. You write beautifully. Such a powerful message in a short piece. Keep up the wonderful works!!
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Oh, wow...This is so beautifully written...This is a concept that very few people can write about with any sort of clarity, but you've done a wonderful job...I look forward to reading more of your work, and good luck in the contest. Much love to you and yours,
Nicole
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I really love this piece it was short and oh so sweet! I just created a contest, it is my very first, and with you writing a piece like this I think you should enter. Here is the link. allpoetry.com/Contest/2062110
Thanks for sharing this piece with everyone and keep up the awesome writes.
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this is a good write. nice flow and tone to it. The images are a nice touch. Makes one think...always good on that.
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This is a beautiful poem. It makes a very clear point. But I don't think anyone can truly open their hearts completely. Good write though.
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Great
Very well done, sad that so many hearts are broken, but it is true that trust and openess are necessary for love. -
I really enjoyed your poem, and the advice it gives. They say love hurts, but it also feels so wonderful, it's worth a little gambling on it. Great writing!
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very nice. a unique poem in the way its one that makes you think and just how nice the wording is instead of one that is a whole bunch of metaphors. nice work.
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very well done
This is wonderfully done!!!!!!!!!!! and the answer is: yes it is worth it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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very good
now that is a question and a half my friend ,..thank you fo rsharing this with us and keep up the good work wonderfull picture also
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How true. And really, in a moment such as you describe we must be in the moment.... not thinking of lonely moments before nor concerning ourselves with what moments the future may hold.
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wow this is so true! its a great poem and it obviously comes from the heart! keep it up!
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whoa! this si a very very very good poem! it tottaly makes scence! i liked it alot and i think it is a great poem keep up the good work and keep writing!!!
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Thank you!
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Yes, it certainly is worth it, and this poem should be bookmarked and used as a reference to send all the angst poets to read it. It is a sweet and true message!
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Beautiful
This is a beautiful poem, short but it gets the point across. I think I go with Keith's comment about being in someone's arms, but I would certainly want it to last longer than a moment. A forever moment would be nice
Thank you for such beautiful words and good luck with the contest, oh and a beautiful background to the poem also.
Best Wishes
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Thank you for the great comment!
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Thank you for your wonderful comment! I hope you do find your one true love.
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Thank you for the nice comment!
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singer, well piece, a nice way to describe an old over used Cliché, it was a good turn, wise in wisdom and offering hope to the broken heart all done in a short, touching piece. image and visions
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Excellent write
True love or not?
I don't really care anymore!
Just to be in someones arms,and held even if it be for a moment.
Is wonderful So think not that you might pain?
Think only of that moment and never forget it! -
Excellent poem. Beautiful background and picture. Good question, I have asked myself that question many times. As I am sure we all have. Thank you for sharing. You are very talented. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Jeannie D Hunter
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Awesome Read!
This is quite exquisitely beautiful! That is an interesting question at the end. I don't know how I would answer it. Certainly a well put point!
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how true of love written very well i might add keep up the great work
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Very true and b-e-a-utifully written. Your words flowed like the ocean. I can truly relate to this poem. Sometimes I get kind of afraid to get in relationship after relationship because I wonder if I can take another heart-break. But then I realize that I'd rather risk my heart than never feel the warmth of love in my life. So I put my heart on my sleeve always because I know that if I do get hurt, I'm strong enough to pick up my heart and start over again. Even if it takes getting hurt, I will never stop looking for my true love. Great poem. Love,Love,Loved it. Keep writing.
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One second to be in the arms of one who really loves isn't worth heartbreak. Heartbreak shouldn't happen to those who are pure and simple lovers. When the heart of a true lover breaks. Its the worest feeling in the world. You feel like not living. You feel like there is nothing for you. You feel like your the most worthless lifeform on the planet. Then everyday you cry and cry and scream out your lovers name until your throat is bleeding. But all in all this is a very great poem.
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YES!!!!!!!!.........so worth it. Beautiful words, beautiful write.
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short, sweet and thought provoking. it sort of reminds me of the old saying, "it is better to have loved and lost than never loved at all"...which i was never sure i agreed with.
when the pain hits....it never seems worth it, but when love hits, it all seems worth it.
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I agree
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Wow, This is AMAZING! it is just so full of emotion and sadness.and also truth.yu showed so much emtion through little words. which i thinks, is really hard to do sometimes, but you did it! this was a great poem and good luck in the contest! keep up the great work!
God Bless,
OnlyInMyDreams -
Thank you for the sweet comment! As you can tell I have alot of time to think about things...LOL. I hope someday it will help me in life but then sometimes I worry it might get the better of me. Either way I guess it's lifes lessons.
Your comments always bring a smile! Thanks again!
Hugs & Kisses - Cayla -
Awesome poem great vivid details and amazing background. I loved the whole poem. This is a fantastic poem keep up the good work and good luck in the contest.
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Good question I loved that poem. It was really good. I miss talking to you, sis
talk to you soon, i hope
missy
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Tender/Beautiful!
My precious AP daughter dear, you sure know how to express yourself to the point it almost feels like the words read from your poetic pages fall off into our hearts and move us....For that's the power of love. ~sighs~
Thanks for sharing you,
always good to read your sweet soul!
Wishing you the very best in...
life, love, and this contest!
-Timothy, aka Daddio~
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Ah, you're welcome for the comment. This is not my contest however. I am however trying to read everyones work in the contests I enter nad comment. I believe it will help other and myself and provide me points to run contests. I've been reading some wonderful poems, yours included. Keep up the fabulous writes!
Best of luck in the future,
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Thanks for the great comment! Altough the thought of being a philosopher makes me laugh. But you never know..LOL. Thanks also for the help, I've fixed it so I hope it reads better.
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Uncle Tang, Thanks as always for the nice comment AND the help! Sometimes I get carried away and don't notice when I add to many words...LOL.
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Wow. *Blink blink*
This is...wow.
This is deep, really deep. Sad and sincere and amazing. Wow. Great job. Best of luck in this contest.
-Nathan -
I'm glad you're back. it is a honor to read your words I like this a lot.
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Well said. So much said with so little words. Thank you for sharing.
Scribs -
this was really great. k read the criteria for the contest, and i think this fits into it beautifully. and i absolutely think you have the best one and should win without a doubt! (that may or may not be just a tad bias though!) best of luck!
-chantelle -
Excellent
Beautiful thoughts kiddo, and wonderfully worded. I think we have the makings of a philosopher on our hands. Bravo sweetie. There is a saying...with age comes wisdom...so you gonna be one smart cookie when you get my age. Love ya kiddo, Granny Cheri
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wow gurl you really know how to start making people thinking about their own lives and taking a second look. awesome poem keep writing sis!!
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My Dearest Niece,
This is truly coming from your pure romantic heart.
I love the thought of one second of true love vs pain 1000 x's over. Makes me think back checking for those seconds that I have enjoyed and to more to come.
Another beauty in words.
Uncle loves you,
Tang
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