When I reach out
You move on
I call your name and you don't respond
Whatever I say seems to be wrong
I try to understand
But you push me away
We go through the same thing
Day after day
I express my mind
And we get in a fight
This pattern leaves me turning
Night after night
Then the next day
I see you smile
We give each other a hug
And the pain is dulled for awhile
But I'm sick and tired
Of this same old thing
I try to move on
But I worry of the pain it could bring
So I need to know
What's the deal?
Do you love me?
Is that how you really feel?
If you read this
I want you to know, it's not you it's me
Wait, what am I saying
Can this be?
Your reaction doesn't matter
It won't in the morn'
The way you've treated me
Has me confused and forlorn
I wish we could be friends
But I know that can't be
In the end the only one of us I'll care about
Is me
As I move on
So should you
Because, you know what?
I'm through with you
Author notes
Written June 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- I Want To Feeeelll The Emotion(prewrites allowed) any subject.. by dragontuba.
600 points, ended April 3, 2007, 135 entries
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Excellent
I love this poem and can totally understand as I feel the same at times
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Excellent!
Reminds me of the ordeal put to words I just went through with a man who was a womanizer, a liar and a cheat. I loved this cad.
I have resigned myself to the fact this guy will never love me truly, says he loves me and the woman he lived with, who he ran right back to. He is not for me, it hurts less now, thank God!
What a waste of love , time, effort, but taught me a lesson not to ever trust him again. Not to believe him, ever again for it was all one big lie for his ego.
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Oh my gosh! You are the first person to truly understand this poem! That is exactly the type of situation that I was going through when I wrote this! It is truly unfortunate that some guys act this way. Thank you so much for your wonderful comment.
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wow this is great i love it
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Thank you so much for all the applause!
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How did you know who I wrote this about? I wrote it quite awhile ago. But I'm glad you like it!
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i really like this poem...i've written a bunch just like it about the same person...coincidence...i think not!
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Yeah this is great
i love the first stanza it's perfect
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Hmm...well, what do you like to write about?
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Thanks for your comment (even though you did kinda write in circles, lol). I'm glad you liked it. I'm trying to come up with a new topic to write about, any suggestions?
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Wow, this is wonderful. Your emotions just...ok, I'm having trouble with words right now, but it was very well written and I really liked your use of emotion. (Going around in a nice circle, eh?) I liked the rhyming pattern too; it flowed really nicely. Please keep writing. Great job!
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Thank you so much for what you said! I'm glad you liked my poem.
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very good
you go girl ! and be happy there is one out there that will treat you as you deserve to be treated ,keep up the good work and welcome to Ap
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Thank you so much! I was worried about the flow but I'm glad you liked it.
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Awesome!
I loved it!
I especially liked the ending.
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'As I move on
So should you
Because, you know what?
I'm through with you'
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It is so smooth, I absolutly love it!
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