Mirror
Stained image.
This memory haunts.
Looking into my soul.
The tears drip down like acid rain.
But who would care.
For I am alone.
On Earth.
Loneliness
Author notes
First option. Noodles and sprite. I had it in here it just got messed up cause i never added the type of poem it was.
sorry
Rose
Written June 1st, 2006
What did you think
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I like it.Each line is so perfect and I like the imagery I get from this.
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Awe so sad and dark and beautiful. THe lost girl inside me loves this. I like the shortness of it as well.
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This is such a piercing write!
way to torture us boldly!
for what is lonliness but the need to reach out!
Lovely dark poem to enjoy!
well done...we felt it vividly!
ears/Seattle
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I really liked this! First thing, my favourite line!
"The tears drip down like acid rain."
Amazing imagery, loved it!!
But one thing is I do think that the line "For I'm alone." would actually sound better if the contraction I'm was changed to I am. But that' sjust my personal opinion! Great write hun!!!
Cassie -
hey i removed you because you were the only person who entered so if you want join this other one its the same thing but a defferent title etc...same rules... ♥ morfi
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I think it's supposed to be syllables (not words) ...but I really like it anyway.
<3
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