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Better Realities Await

Drifting on glossy black glass
Drifting through a sea of dark black water
Drift into the open
Green, Yellow, Red
Slow, Turn, Faster
Understand that at this precise moment
Everything in this world is in sync,
And harmony, and
Perfection

Costing though puddles created five minutes ago
Costing so that strings of pearl-like
Drops of water fly upward instead of
The downward decent they had already just been through
Yellow, Red, Green
Don’t slow, Don’t turn, Faster still
Realize that tonight, you are alive
All that is wrong, and false, and bad
In this world
Has meaning
And you were supposed to contribute

Burn rubber on the dark, black glass
That is the road
Spin out
A beautiful reflection looks back at you as
You look down at the road while you drive
A better, blurred version of you stares back
A perfect, nay,
Immaculate reflection of what you could have been
But, this is your reality
Learn to accept it and make the most of it
Red, Green, Yellow
Break the law

The more you drive, the more you feel
In sync with the universe
Faster, drive faster, just drive faster, faster,
Too fast, Yellow…
Red
Foot on the pedal, pedal on the floor
Tires half-heartedly attempt to stop
They know, yes, they know all about you
How you could have been that reflection
How you could have been the beautiful blur in the road
How you could have helped the world
How you could have helped yourself
And, how you never tried to do any of it
And thus, to pay the price, you give your life
Wheels spin out from under you
The automobile spins in circles across the stoplight intersection
Like a beautiful Olympic Ice-Figure Skater
Going for the gold
Faster, spin faster, just spin faster, faster,
Too fast, Tree…
9.9 (cheers), 9.8 (cheers), 9.8 (cheers), 8.5 (boos), 9.9 (cheers), 9.7 (cheers), 9.4 (cheers)
Total Score:  An Evenly Odd 67
You receive a silver medal
A total of six spins before your trunk collides with the trunk of the tree
{a crinkling of metal is heard, felt, and tasted all at once}
The spins slow, but not before the wheels continue to
Betray your existence
Into the freezing cold pond you go
The pond that has a 24,000 dollar fancy water-fountain in its center
Lost to the sub-zero temperatures
Lost to the world
But the blurred version of you has been found
It swims to you, embracing you as
You’re strapped into your coffin with (traitor) wheels
Air bubbles slowly escape from your lips
Drift up to the world of harsh reality
A world you get to leave
Your last contribution to the world, carbon dioxide,
Will be used by plants to make oxygen for other people living their harsh realities
Your eyes drift shut, as
A blurred version of you holds you close
Close to death now
You drift away
To better worlds with better realities filled with better people and plants and lights and roads
Drifting away while a beautiful, blurred, and better version of you holds your corpse
Wet hair lazily waving in the current
Headlights slowly dying out as the battery joins you in a better reality
A beautiful, blurred, and better version of you holds you close before
It too, goes to join you in a better reality
And just like that,
Everything of you winks out of existence

Author notes

Just so you understand, the 9.8 things are there as kind of a continuation of the Olympic refrence and the 67 is even because it is an actual number, not a decimal or anything like that, and it is odd because 67 is an odd number.  Some people were confused about that.  Hope you liked it.
Written June 1st, 2006

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  • Scion
    January 29, 2007

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    Wow. Haunting... I feel that you really captured the feeling of dying alone. it is so powerful, my friend. and. i was very amused and half-stricken by the judging points.. it was quite ironic. and my god, it reminds of the song Wreckage by Vanessa Carlton. omg. it really does. if you haven't heard it, i really suggest it. it's beautifully haunting, just like this poem.
    Scion


  • Indrid Cold
    June 8, 2006
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    Thank you and thanks for actually replying. I'm glad you liked it at any rate.


  • KeeperOfTheNight
    June 1, 2006
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    wow .... it's really intriguing , it made me think , it's so random but at the same time fits everything and makes it all clear , very beautful and flowed amazingly well , you have great talent run far with it!