It's majestic form descends once more,
and peeps between the clouds and trees,
this sphere of life ducks out of sight,
below horizons of the Seas.
To bring the black and ugly night,
the Stars obscured by tree and cloud,
the Moon will fight the wind and rain,
but not get chance to shine out proud.
No shadows do the buildings cast,
no light invades this vacuum street,
the only sound the howling wind,
and rapid falling rains' repeat.
In complete darkness of the void,
we stare at Death and see it's smile,
it takes another soul tonight,
it may be your turn in a while.
And as we wait to take out turn,
the Sun peeps up above the line,
still obscured by cloud and tree,
another day to live and shine.
But we all know day turns to night,
the world becomes a silhouette,
the Sun returns below the Seas,
brings forth Dark Light and Black Sunset.
Author notes
Written June 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- your favourite write by neonuts.
300 points, ended July 27, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - dark and sad rhyming poems please by nobodys-girl.
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Creatively refreshing!
a great poem that shrouded my mind in great darkness as I felt submerge and consume by the passion of your words.
-What was your driving inspiration to your masterful piece of literature?
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Good luck in the contest!!
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this was a great poem....your words were strong,powerful and emotional as well..this poem was very well written and I enjoyed reading this poem..keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
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well written! thankyou so much for entering and best of luck!
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first off let me apologise for not leaving this feedback sooner I've had a really hetic couple of months and unfortunately it fell when I posted a contest, so I'm only now getting round to leaving everyone feedback.
Such a Powerful piece that really makes you think. It’s not really something I’d considered before, comparing the sunset to death but I suppose it is in its own way. Really lovely write that flows well and rhymes brilliantly without appearing forced. Thank you for taking the time to enter and sharing your poem.
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Thanks for sharing your wonderful work with us.
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dark, well written. I love it.
good luck ♥
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