Sliver of the moon in her heart
ripples through the bone and tissue
streaks down the cheeks
to pool in the sad lines
around a quick silvered mouth
edges, ruffled around the parables
and psalms of sorrow and salaciousness
where family names and dates
are criss-crossed with fine nib and ink
to show the slide of tenth anniversaries
tendrils slipping from a thin French knot
whisper around neck and ears
where lover’s kisses used to touch
but are left cold as a sliver of ice
shining in the starlight
shifting spirits moving from ground
to the grave upward places we call heaven
where stars strobe their own tears and fears
alone in her dark next time
where unfulfilled dreams rest and wait
Author notes
Written June 1st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- ~ Colour Therapy ~ ...:::Silver:::... (For Collection of Trophies ONLY) by -LilacThOughts-.
300 points, ended June 20, 2006, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ty, Malabu. So nice to see you again.
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i tried to use lots of "s" sounds to expound on the sigh of it. thank you for you kind words and nice comment.
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awe Twistie....congrates on your win well deserved
Hugs
Mal -
Very nice and tender written verses twista. Like a reyl silver dream. Perfect used pictures and words make them to flow simply the great.
It looks like or destiny is to be the same time at the same place. Wish you a lot of great poetry again.
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You are welcome, Lilac thoughts. I did so grow to love her when I was old enough to understand her bitterness.
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This is an impressive write, you really have pulled me into this one...I can picture your grandmother so vividly, it makes you think though, how this all came to be, for her to hold this bitternes in her heart and not let it go...people usually mellow as they get older but your grandmother never did...you have done an exceptional job of showing us through emotion and wonderful metaphors...
This stanza that took my breath away...
'tendrils slipping from a thin French knot
whisper around neck and ears
where lover’s kisses used to touch
but are left cold as a sliver of ice
shining in the starlight'
I feel such a sadness when I read those lines...
thank you for this entry...
~Lilac~
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Welcome, Malabu. It is all attitude, I believe. Some seem to thrive on diffculties, some cave in quietly, some merely get a sharp edge to them to give what they felt they received. It was pitiful really. Imagine to get into ones 80's and to ahve conditioned themselves to such bitterness. that is why I say, save me from such.
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thank you hoodoolover. I spent many years trying to get to the bottom of how my grandfather could be such a loving happy persona nd my grandmother a bitter one. It made me love her as I sorted out how very difficult her life had been.
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I guess I could say I feel the sadness of a life lived...someone near and dear......lay restful to a life filled with ups and downs....always having something to say about affecting situations around them...be they right or wrong....silent moments come uneasy....remembering and wondering......will they ever find true happiness now.....this is what comes to my mind......reading this thoughtful and wonderfully penned thoughts...
Mal -
Really moving, the sense of regret and sadness was almost overwhelming in the end, great job!
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aw, thank you...it is ok to feel fuzzy....
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well i loved this poem it made me fell fuzzy (some how dont look at me im weird) lol....but it was good
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I wrote one about my grandfather and so I wanted to write one about my grandmother. This is her and my take on why, perhaps, she was such a bitter sharp-tongued little wisp of a woman that I grew to love.
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Sad evocations in this.But well in elocution and story's line.Masterful emotions fly on slivers of silvers wing.~~Suseann
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thamk you. god preserve me from a life unfulfilled.
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Hi twistasista and welcome to my contest...
I am just reading for now and will comment later
~Lilac~
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a slice of sadly silvered beauty here, sista.
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