Is this life…
A young girl being raped
over and over, by none other…
than her adopted father
Or an eleventh year old girl ,
that runs away from home
for she is being abused
by her own mother and father
Is this life…
A teenage girl at the age of 14
misguided and blinded
by a corrupted system and false beliefs
Thinking she finds love in an older man
A man that could be her father
Very demanding and abusive
Who beats on her at a daily basis
And still have the nerve to say
“I love you so”
Is this life…
A mother who loves her son…
struggles half of her life to raise a man
Now at the age of 18 and still a kid
Fighting a war overseas
Kills his own brothers and sisters
Fear of being killed
Now back at home tearing
For he is now getting in touch
with his inner soul
Is this life…
A little boy with no father,
but looks up to his big brother
Who teaches him how to steal and kill
Never accomplishes anything in life
Now on death row pleading for his life
Confesses and wishes to repent
but his destiny has been drawn
from the verdict of his long life lived
Is this life…
A drug dealer that's making money,
to provide for his family
makes one small mistake
and ends up in a grave
Or a coward “father” who leaves home
because he can’t handle taking care of his kids.
And 10 yrs later, his son becomes
a doctor, a lawyer or a basketball player
Earning millions for his hard work
and one day his dad calls his home
I don't know how to even begin
I am sorry to tell you this
“son...I’m your father”
Is this life
To wake up each and every day
and hear the same old news
A mother or a father has killed his own kid
Is this life when all the beautiful things
start to fade or evaporate like vapor
in front of our own eyes
Or is it just my life?
Is this life
The sun dries the seeds of the earth
the wind blows and scatters our love in the mist
as the rain floods the heart of our home
Author notes
Option 1)
About how you really feel about this life not how u feel about someone ur lover.
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Wow. Very deep. You described all the true horrors in life. Not what I expected when I did this contest but you blew me away. Keep on writing you are amazing.
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I don't like the repetition of "is this life" -
but the piece itself is profound and disturbing, as I believe its meant to be.
This is life for so many, it is heartbreaking.
The drug dealer stanza hit me the hardest, the part about a father returning after years and years of not being there.
The last four lines I would add together - a very strong piece -
This was extremely powerful. Life is unfair, incredibly so. Things like this happen every day and it's not of us to figure out what's going on in people's minds and make them stop any of it. And so the world turns on...
Wow. This definitely made me think.
Nice job. Thanks for entering. -
nice bab
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Very Interesting!
A bit long the poems are supposed to be no more than 75 lines, by the AP Counter! Perhaps you can edit it down a kittle? I suppose just cutting ou the spaces after each "Is this life" makes it short enough! Dark, sad but instructive and sympathetic! Good work! Good luck in the contest!
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Very real, very true piece. Sickening and so desperately sad that this is life. Thank you for entering
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I don't understand it either... but the tv sure does glamorize and shows us all the evil in the world doesn't it. I wish I could get a hold of it. I would have all the beautiful things happening babies being born...
friends showing at your door with brand new mattresses,Christmas trees when you can't afford it
Volunteers going out of their way every day to feed the hungry
the person that stops of calls for someone when they see one stranded in the middle of the highway..
I could go on..
this stuff should be on tv...
not all the other negative stuff
the fruits .... God gives us fruits of the spirit...
these shine within people...
Here are the fruits Mack
"But the fruit of the Spirit is love, joy, peace, longsuffering, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, gentleness, self-control." (Galatians 5:22)
these attributes should be shown...
I know hope I didn't write to much..and I know you wrote this a long time ago.
God Bless you -
wow...i seriously have tears in my eyes...this is very powerful. Kind of depressing, but that's kind of the point isn't it? Thank you for entering my contest.
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yeah... you've described some painful, and unfortunately true things of life - especially how cruel and stupid the human kind can be...
A strong and powerful complaint you've written here - well done!
Leander -
Sadly so VERY true ~ Nice write ~ I especially enjoyed the form used ~ by doing so you've created a powerful piece. It's powerful enough to make folk question life and what we are willing to accept as a society. Nice job.
Thanks for entering our contest ~ good luck to you. -
very sad, but true, this is life, no, not just yours,
I like the use of the question posed to readers throughout, after each scenerio. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
Sincerely,
Sassy
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wow! thank you for entering my contest
i lovethe emotion and this and your use of the rhetorical question at the end was really well used...
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this is a great write well done
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I love this i thought it was really nice i love the ending "Or is this just my life" wow i love the sincerity deffinetly love this different and i love the repentance of "Is this life"
It has a relaxed sincerity
very passionate poem
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wow
this made me sad good job
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Good Luck!!
WOW that was very deep.That gave me shivers. I truly enjoyed reading this piece
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the tragedies with which I work everyday as a child protection social worker - it never ceases to confound me that human beings can be so cruel to one another ... thanks for your piece ...
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Very touching, one wonders sometime why things happen the way they do - for wht reason does one have to suffer so? Does not seem fair, but life is not fair relly, is it? Easy to read and understand this poem - filled with emotions that tear at our heartstrings.
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Yes, this is life, and questioning it and trying to change it is all we can do to make it better but not too many people are bothered
you make very good examples and points and i enjoyed this poem as a poem though it does cause pain - but then emotiveness to me is a sign of a good writer 
great stuff. xxx
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Really sad! This poem made me cry!
You are a sad writer, I think. You can write poems that make people happy too. I don't mean to to say this is a bad write. It is full of emotions but what I'm saying is next time you write a poem, write a happy poem. This is just a small request from your fan.
Warm regards,
Ganesh
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amazing!!
Insightful, complex, confusing. It's life is not a fair substance, we all know that. And yes, it is life. It's not just your life, you are not alone. You are never alone. It feels like that, and it feels like you will never see the sun or the sky again. It's ok to be scared. It's ok to not want to talk about life. But that really is the best way to handle it. It's never easy to sit there and watch someone get hurt, even if it's just on the news. Either way, you are just trying to help them in your own, subtle way.
You continuously ask the question, "Is this life...?" Well, like I mentioned previously, it is life. Life is disappointing at times. It's not easy to just sit there and deal with the troubles and treasures of life. It's not something you can do alone either. I'm sure you have one close friend. Even if it's a family memeber, there is at least one person who you are close to... and you care about them. They reciprocate. Everyone needs someone, and everyone has someone. But hey, let me know if you don't, because I would be more than happy to be that person.
Now as far as the actual poem... it's beautful. Your wording is great, and you captured something not many are able too. Wonderful job! Keep it up... and you won't have to serve life without parole. -
wow, this poem is just great, and its wonderful that you had the guts to put this down in words, because i know it takes a lot to write some things down, and i imagine it was extremely hard for you to write this down. great poem, and i hope that your life really isnt like this, and if it is, my prayers are with you.
Wish You The Best,
God Bless,
~*Kris*~ -
wow great write. its so deep and powerful. u are a great writer. never underestimate what life will hand you.....
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Superbly done. I am so impressed, its so real and unforgiving i love it
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Yes, it is terrible...but I think that these people can be helped to reclaim their lives back. I think that what has happened to us...to society...is terrible...but dispairing is not going to help us. We have to stand up and try and change things. and then raped is spelt with only one p
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Amazing
It is not just your life. I am very sad to say that this is the sick reality that is happenning
"And still have the nerve to say
“I love you so”".. AMAZING .. and tha stanza about the dad leaving. Hit me hard. Rape .. by the way. in the first line .. if thats what you meant.
I love this poem. and it is very deep, wise, understanding, and brings an ounce of awareness to the unfairness of our sick little world. -
Great!
Whoa, really good ending there. That part was my favorite! I like how you give all these examples but the reader doesn't know which applies to you (if your username has nothing to do with it.) this is a really powerful peice, nicely done! -
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Life Without Parole,
This was a strong piece of work, banging with emotion
I could feel the anger as I read, the messages you pasted both written and non written where like a stampede of bulls gone nuts in a parade.
Every line I read had a new slap and a shout of listen while you read just don’t read!
Lots of power here.
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Brilliant Poem
Holy moly, this is an extremely deep poem and vividly described. Thank you for writing this poem, that deals with the atrocities that exists all around us, and making us think about the horrors that are out there in the world. This is outstandingly well written, with good meter and flow. Just one little typo "A mother who loves her on son…" Don't you mean her OWN son. Warm hugs and smiles -
From Sukrit
You are right,all this bad things in the world is not really the world,Life needs improvement,The lines:-
Earning millions for his hard work
and one day his dad calls his home
I don't know how to even begin
I am sorry to tell you this
“son...I’m your father”
Is this life
To wake up each every day
and hear the same old news
A mother or a father has killed his own kid
Is this life when all the beautiful things
start to fade or evaporate like vapor were nice. -
Wow this is awesome, it is so very honest and open and represents so many feelings we can all relate to. It is also full of questions which challenge the reader to ask themselves exactly what 'life' may actually constitute. brilliant!
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whoa!!!! htat is deep i think the end was the best!!!! i liked this poem very much because i can relate to ALOT of it! people need to wake up and relize what is going on in life and ask "is this life?" i'm glad some one got the courge and talent to write somthing so strong like this! nicely written and keep up the good work!!!!
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