I thought we discussed this
You said you wouldn't lie to me anymore
I thought you were true with your words
But you continue to tell me that lover's lie
Without realizing how sensitive my heart is
You continue to tell me a lie after a lie
As we dance around this subject,
The you and the I; we dodge and we weave
This very fairy tale of us
A tale that is techincolor
but never black and white
A myth I force myself to believe
Without realizing how my heart is collecting dust
Dust of bull-craps you never cease to tell
I wish I could admit it to myself.
So I try to find the meaning,
I try to understand what this is I'm feeling...
there is something that lies within
something that twists me in knots
something dark that I can't comprehend,
But still I can't let go
I try to make sense of things
when there was no sense to begin with
that I much I convince myself into believing
But all along I've been wrong
Because of you my vision is numb
I am paralyzed by your own very lie
I've lost the meaning of these words,
little black letters on a screen.
they don't mean anything
without a voice to add truth.
and I can't find my conviction,
I'm lost in indecision.
I've been numbed by my inability
to find a resolution.
and my heart breaks each night
when I awake in confusion
and reality falls back in to place,
bringing with it the truth about you...
and peering out my window
at the grey light of dawn, lit by night's still glittering stars,
i can see through the mist that sits atop the houses lining my street;
i can see beyond this sleeping city scene;
i can see my future with you,
and i am calm, i am serene
and i can breathe,
knowing i can still feel like this.
so I'll let you go, sweetheart,
I'm letting go.
because I love you,
I'm letting you go.
Author notes
yo yo yo wats happenin
A contest entry
- Anything About Having to Move On by Athena of Starlite.
445 points, ended June 27, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love poetry Men V.S. Women by LadyInRed55.
300 points, ended June 25, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Feel... by KittieLyyn.
360 points, ended June 24, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ALMOST Anything and Everything! Win Memberships! by kiwikrazi37.
369 points, ended August 14, 2007, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pimp up my free verse by leander.
400 points, ended January 6, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 13 of 13
-
I loved this piece your emotions were strong and had me reading on and on... great job with this piece
-
Even though it hurts a lot - especially when you love that particular person from the bottom of the heart - it's probably still better to let this person go because in the end, you'd be the one that'll be hurt the most...
Thanks for this entry as well!
Leander -
beautiful. i loved this part.
I wish I could admit it to myself.
So I try to find the meaning,
I try to understand what this is I'm feeling...
there is something that lies within
something that twists me in knots
something dark that I can't comprehend,
But still I can't let go
I try to make sense of things
when there was no sense to begin with
that I much I convince myself into believing
But all along I've been wrong
Because of you my vision is numb
I am paralyzed by your own very lie
great job. -
GReat images here!! Great write
Thanks alot for entering my contest & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Wow My Friend
Bravo
I started to enter this same Contest, but I see the one who are sure to win this over is you.
So profound in the words you use, contueing to draw the reader in from start to finish.
Beautiful & sad, finally letting go can be a hard thing to do, especially when your Heart says otherwise.
Gr8 write and teh Best of Luck in this Contest.
Wonderful Imagery too.....
Piff
-
awww this is really good. No lie... this is perfect. wow i really like this. The moood and everything. It was so sincere.
"i can see through the mist that sits atop the houses lining my street;
i can see beyond this sleeping city scene;
i can see my future with you,
and i am calm, i am serene"
really nice!!!
-
Though I don't like your form, your profound thought and intense emotion wowed me. Congrats.
-
i can relate, but not totally
wow, i know exactly what you feel like...for a while, my girlfriend lied to me alot, but everything worked out in the end...my trust never wavered...thats my problem...i trust TOO much...great poem tho, excellant...which is odd cause i normally dont like poems that dont rhyme, but i love this...great write A++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ -
This is very deep...
I love it! The ending is great too!
We all go through this, and by the sounds of it, you did too. We all have trouble letting go.
Sorry, but either way, this is a beautiful poem. -
i love this poem, especially the very ending because I love you, I'm letting go, I feel so connected, because in my life right now I'm getting ready to make that same decision, and you work really help me to finally put it in to words. Thank you so very very much.
-
A+
wow i can really connect with this. You told a story very well with this poem! and the emotions were very well convayed. there were a few confusing phrases but it kinda added to the poem because, i belive, one of the feelings you were trying to convay was confusion. the only thing i would say to change is line 10. instead of 'A tale that is colored in multicolor' i would try 'This tale has been in techincolor but never black and white' again a beautiful job -
Very Good Work. Yes love does hurt unfortunatley and there are times you feel like dying, but there is someone out there who loves you for who you are with no strings. Don't give up hope.
-
AWWW. i like this.Sounnnds like(with the emotions)that this was true.sorry. This is good.
Adding your comment:
1 - 13 of 13
