Hiding behind her piercings and tattoos
Is everything she holds so dear
Sadly no one dares to explore
The depths of her soul
With every colorful scar she engraves into flesh
another part of her dies
With every new hole
Another tear falls
This young lady you see
Is only lost in her own confusion
All she really needs
Is a tender soul to guide her along
She surrounds herself with unknown friends
Attempting to find comfort
In atmospheres she's unfamiliar with
Adapting quickly
She's the young life
Who will always have
That tinge of joy
Mixed with unhappiness
Hiding behind her tattoos and piercings
Is everything she holds so dear
Author notes
Constructive Critisism Welcome. This is somewhat trying to describe myself.
Written May 30th, 2006
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Your poem flows so beautifully with an important message. Do not judge a book by its cover. You have exposed a tender and thoughtful part of yourself in this beautiful poem. It is truly lovely and so is the poet. Thank you for sharing this, You have helped open some eyes that were perhaps squinting.
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i like the way u used the idea of tattoos and piercings... dunno if its rite but wot i got is that from these she can express herself as the person the people surrounding her want her to be.. if u follow lol. they are looking for companionship but doin so by becoming hu they think they should b to fit in not hu thy truely are. great poem. really enjoyed reading it
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Very cool. I love tatoos and piercings. I plan on getting a few myself. ^^ -gives a thumbs up- Cool job.
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this is really sad. sounds like you are having a hard time. and need someone to love and love you back. i feel that way sometimes too. good write..i love it
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this is a beautiful poem, it really shows you put you're soul into it. you did an awesome job!!!! -
This poem is really beautiful, but a bit conflicting. The beginning leads the reader to believe that the girl is at an emotional breaking point, as if she is completely alone with no hope of a bright future. But the ending states that she is a "young life" with a "tingle of joy", which directly goes against the feelings that you established at the start of the poem. It is almost as if you began with an idea that strayed as the poem progressed. But dont get me wrong, this is a brilliant write. I love that you used tattoos and piercings as elements to disguise pain. This truly was a deep piece with a certain lingering sadness. Nice job.
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Thanks for the comment and the read, ill be more than happy to comment on those poems for you.
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Aww beautiful, thanks so much for the comment, it means the world to me. You do not need to take lessons, your an amazing poet, I sware to you! Thanks again for the comment and the read.
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I really do think the title says it all,and the third paragraph was the best to me.I hope you keep trying!
By the way,could you applaud/comment on my poem called
"slipping into the scenes"
and
"I believe"? Please? Thanks so much!
Your group friend,
Vladmir-Y K - the silent 22 -
oh sweetie! Absolutly amazing. I'm sorry you're feeling this way though, chin up love! ♥ i really love you! And you've done an amazing job with this. You have always had a real talent for poetry-i need to take lessons. AMAZIN sweetie. I promise! You keep this up okay? Because i love youuu!!
yo best girlie
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this is a very good poem! I like it a lot! this part was my favorite:
With every colorful scar she engraves into flesh
another part of her dies
With every new hole
Another tear falls
again, great job! keep up the great work!
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this poem i think is very deep. i like the peart were every scar she makes takes part of her away. love it!
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this poem is fun, i like tats and piercings and i can see how shes hiding herself. Yeah she does kinda need someone but still this poem was cool.
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