The day I met you, something came over me,
and when you touched my hand my heart skipped a beat.
Made me think that you could like me without a great feat.
I gave you my precious heart to hold in your hands,
and for the first time I trusted someone.
All I saw were my flaws, I thought you saw none.
But instead of cherishing the heart I had given you,
you slowly squeezed until I could take no more.
Your grip tightened, I screamed and my blood began to pour.
Without compassion or a mere second thought,
you threw it down and left me alone.
Left me in darkness, the answer to my question unknown.
Was I too blind to see the whole picture?
The fact that I wasn't good enough for you,
or did you just find someone new?
So now I have to move on with what I have left.
My heart sewn and stapled, I look on,
for now I am the queen and you the pawn.
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Written May 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Betrayed by Emerald Dreams.
300 points, ended July 23, 2006, 14 entries
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sure sure i like it it's really... you haha different people just have this kinda "air" to them i suppose and this is yours
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I relate to this a lot..I love the end line especially, well done, keep up the good work!
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Wow. I know exactly how you feel. I have been in a situation where I place my trust in a person and gave them my heart and they destroyed it for their own gain. The only thing I can say is that in times like that you just pick yourself up and move on with the lessons that you have learned. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Emerald -
wonderful imagery! I like the rhymes and your word choices...this has a good flow to it!...Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
~Madd~ -
Your end line is really amazing, a great conclusion to an amazing poem. your rhyming was a -little- forced, but nothing that affects it too badly. your title is very creative, and seeing as i never usually have a title to my work, it really amazed me how it fit. This is beautiful. Keep writing.
Good luck
§hatteredExi§tence -
ive read a couple of your poems now.. i always love the end the best ..keep it up
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