Through the rubble and ruins of his imperfection,
man strikes eternal postures of his design.
Leaving forensic life-prints, he silently speaks
in ghostly echoes of the ages he has shaped.
Mumbling in the dawn of his retarded brain,
survives messages carved in his blinkered eyes.
From the caves in his fragile mind and under
the hood of darkness, his fertile seeds evolving.
The monkey stood, and walked a man to conquer
many kingdoms envisaged and soon to be born.
Manufacturing strings of new born intelligence
to tether the chaos of his sudden random thought.
Under the hair and hood of his benighted-ness
the journeyman laid foundations of his inquisition.
To search the mystery of his enlightened link and
spawn the army of souls to wander far for answers.
Out of his blood and evolving bones, stand
scattered temples of his decaying beliefs.
Constructing blueprints of his civilised mind
his secrets etched in ancient codes, remain unlocked.
The world turned four quarters in his clock,
five minutes clicked and a monkey walked as man.
In just one second he polished a civilised tongue,
truth now scratches and sparks revolutions.
The upright monkey pokes the boundary of the stars
with prodding eyes, and dips in his toe.
Into the darkness of his new frontier, his dreams escape,
over two thousand splinters from the loins of the angels.
Descending down through an history of secrets
from the canopy of his grunts and simple life.
The space monkey sits on the edge of the unknown, remains
in born ignorance, still clawing at the mystery of his maker.
Author notes
Written May 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Originality With Meaning by The Slant.
525 points, ended February 29, 2008, 26 entries
Silver trophy winner
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what sophisticated language and thoughts. great great job. thank you for entering this.
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Thanks buddy, I had great fun writing this piece
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awesome use of language
MY word this is the best piece i have read for ages so many deep powerful lines it is so suggestive.IT just flows so well and says so much big well done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
I did a piece going through time like this called SABRE TOOTHED tiger or something I think you would like it.Hats off for this one though it is a quality piece of writing. -
Thank you for reading and commenting, much appreciated
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This poem is very interesting and profound. I think the imagery and ideas in this poem are well-developed and wonderful to read, although in parts I felt some images were a tad redundant - you were repeating the same point a few times somewhat. the poem flows well and is very easy to read. I liked the message in this poem and found it to be a good all-round piece.
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck.
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A wonderful social commentary on the rise of man. I adore the originality with which this concept is tackled. You have used some wonderful, imaginative vocabulary, and given the piece a strong rhythm; if a bizarre title, lol
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A wonderful social commentary on the rise of man. I adore the originality with which this concept is tackled. You have used some wonderful, imaginative vocabulary, and given the piece a strong rhythm; if a bizarre teitle, lol
Congratulations on your Honourable Mention -
awesome poem i loved it so much plus i loved your title because i absolutley love monkeys!
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I liked this a lot. It is humorous in a way, but written very seriously (at least I find it humorous)and that works well.
best of luck in the contest
all my love
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Wow this is very deep. Great use of words. Well written. Good luck in the contest. Jeannie D
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