From the ages long since gone
When gas and dust combined as one
A delicate balance was set in place
And under its spell arose the human race
A Force that pulls in Opposite Directions
Equal in size and mirrored objections
Some call it good and Evil Others Ying and Yang
Whatever it is it stirs within man
Conflict is its border as the line takes stress and strain
And on both sides of the line resides the world’s pain
For there will never be peace as this line shifts back and forth
And in the valley it creates War runs its course
Peace is a myth, the calm before the storm
It’s the eye of the hurricane the universe wont reform
This is how it’s always been and will for evermore
Until some unseen power decides its time to settle the score.
Author notes
Written May 29th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Do you think there will ever be world peace? by Perhaps.
300 points, ended June 12, 2006, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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An interesting piece of writing and form of free verse. Seems very contemplative and intriguing with strong and poignant uses of imagery. Anthony.
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Very nicely written. Cool video as well. =) I can see why you won silver, very nice job. Congrats as well =) Keep on writing, until you can't write no more!
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well penned i enjoyed this piece thoroughly the video accentuated it. keep up the good work and thanks for sharing
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Fantastic is the only word to describe this. You have taken the dark genre and molded it to your own form. There aren't enough superlatives to describe how much I enjoyed this.
Love,
Amera♥
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This is great, Paul. I read it first without the voice and thought, how true, right on. Then I listened to the recording with it... I liked just the reading of it, and Wow, adding your voice lent itself very nicely to the depth and also complimented it with just the right eeriness.
Good job and I see you won a well deserved trophy for your efforts
Dee
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Very Deep and it flows from line to line
Conflict is its border as the line takes stress and strain
And on both sides of the line resides the world’s pain
my favorite part
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Excellent
A marvelous write, indeed. Image, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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Wow.
Just.. Wow.
I really like the rhyme and the flow.
And about how peace doesnt exist. Because it is true. And thats quite a sad thing.
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bravo
This is neat and nifty stuff here! Finely done with some very good rhyme throughout! (line 9 "border", line 10 "sides") again, very finely done poem. bravo... bravo... bravo... -
Your video is absolutely wonderful! The music you chose fits he poem perfectly and the poem itself is great!
Grats!
Kaelin
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Excellent
Wow. This is an awesome poem. A deep and thought provoking piece. It's logical that there will never be peace but we can do our upmost to make sure that our 'home' is peaceful, and if we all have peaceful thoughts they go out into the universe like postive balls of energy. That's why it's so important to try and not think bad things about people especially if they are bad people, because that just gives them more power. Excellent.
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Beautifully descriptive and dark poem which I liked a lot
Keep writing, I like the darkness of this piece
All the best
Pozo
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Hi there Wattle, It’s been a while and that’s my fault have been bogged down with special Projects and Moderator duties. This was the first time I’ve Posted in ages and with more projects stacking up it might be a while before the next… Thanks for the comment
Paul
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Mr 'Cyberartist' I wondered back here looking for what I expected to find and found it. --- You are a thinking persons scribe. Thank you.
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Very,very well written. The rhyme is natural, not forced ( I have so much trouble with that myself I have come to appreciate it in better poet's works) The words flow well, the language is excellent. I like it a lot.
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Yes, so much can be said about this thing what we call destiny isnt it? But what i adore most here are the several references you have made to explain this to us, specially as you come towards the end of the write. Its been a while since I have read from you, but you never stop to teach and make aware of the things araound us, the simple things of life. A very very deep write, thanks for these thoughts!
Love always,
Lencio
PS: Wish I was your editor!!!
lol!!!
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