**THERE IS SOME VIOLENT CONTENT IN THIS POEM...DON'T READ IF YOU CAN'T TAKE IT..SORRY**
He is covered in brush
hiding, never being sensed
he waits for the perfect moment
the perfect victim
he is out of booze
riding on pure hatred
he thinks to himself
"how to get her"
a noise rustles in the distance
he glances and finds his victim
he pounces like a cat
swift but violent
she screams
puts up quite a fight
but he is stronger
more ready and aware
he drags her to his vehicle
and drives remotely
no knowing where to go
he finds a spot
no one will know
she is screaming
piercing the night
he hits her and knocks her out cold
her drags her out into the tree's
proceeds to rape her
knowing she might waken at any moment
he hits her with a shovel just to be sure
blood starts to ooze from her head
gathering in a pool next to some dead leaves
he gets up
feeling exhausted and places her in a shallow grave
he changes clothes and buries the blood ridden ones
he gets in his car, making not a sound
goes home to his wife
holding deep inside
his darkest secret
Author notes
I don't know where this came from but it just came frome the top of my head...it's like what a killer thinks or something like that...don't know but do you like it? 
Written May 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- Amaze Me [1000 points] by Something Real.
1000 points, ended June 18, 2006, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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very scary and realistic. your descriptiveness makes it quite easy to see the different scenes and settings. an interesting read to be sure. i liked the disclaimer you added too. shows your thoughtfulness to the readers.
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I really loved the morbid-ness and brutality.
It was REALLY good....
I love the ending, and the details.
It amazed me && it was really unique.
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this was a well written poem.Although it was a bit scary
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Awesome
The poem is really dark and unique it scared me a little -
Great!
Interesting concept but far too light for me
(I like some crazy messed up stuff, I do) but overall I liked the concept.
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woooah.. wow, very violent - but nicely written.
Monica <3 -
you might try a little more setting, I think it would really strengthen this vision of violence. Also, it might be neat to know how the guy knows that she is coming, or if he has some sort of connection to her, or why he's not content with his wife. Over all you've got a great concept, and a wonderful draft, but I think you can take this so much further
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A+++
This is a really great and unique poem.
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