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House Of Nature

House of nature,
Hidden behind woods.
Home to birds,
That perch upon thy neck.
And to the barriers of nectar.

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Written May 29th, 2006

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  • Frodofan silver member
    June 2, 2006
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    On a nectar kick maybe?

    When you say, to thy neck, do you mean the house? The neck of the house... like the roof maybe?



  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    May 29, 2006
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    Lovely words, so beautifully penned. Thanks for this entry... x LB


  • Zapphire
    May 29, 2006
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    Mmm a really beautiful write.. I especially like the line "House of nature"- it is simple yet creates so much imagery behind those three words strung together.

    Well done and great poem.

    _Zapphire_


  • DancingRed
    May 29, 2006
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    This is a nice little poem. The scene comes to life in such few words. I liked the flow, especially in "house of nature" and "home to birds" You have my appluse!

    DancingRed.