stand still when all move
ancient redwoods, giant in the wood
rings grow round roots ground
no shadows fall nor brush grows
soft sighs, my sanctuary
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Written May 28th, 2006
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Thank you for reading my small thought. Annie
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This is a very lovely tanka. The imagery and the serenity are lovely. I truly found a great pleasure in reading this one.
I hope to read more of your work.
LIZ -
Sometimes it is not how you say it, as much as what you say. A poem well phrased with little meaning wins no praise.
Or so I say, Annie -
Can feel the quietness, the solitude and the peace in this place - a good place to be. Enjoyed this poem - like the brevity in your poems. Always think it is easier to say a lot in a few words, than to ramble on for a long time saying nothing.
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Thank you for reading, I wish I could be among the giants again. I would gladly go back if I had only myself to be. Annie
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This piece is so beautiful! It paints a picture in my mind, and if I am not mistaken, is in tanka form. You have spoken of the perfect sanctuary. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing this piece!
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Thank you for reading my memories of life remembered as real and not just imagery. Annie
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good write... and vivid imagery
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Thank you for reading, The giant redwoods stand looking over history, many a tree stood tall when Jesus walked the earth. What knowledge lay in those rings ,each year brings one anew. Still they stand, moaning at our busy saddness. I sometimes think of going home to the Northwest where I may lay back in the land without shadows. Sunlight reaches down in shafts, spotlights on a moments thought, scattered diamonds flutter in the light.
I see no place for me, except in memory.
Light is blinded with neon signs
Annie -
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its goood, gives a real sense of peace -
Oh this is even beautiful than the last one, the word ancient sounds just wonderful here. I see how detailed this is, i like the third line the best - rings grow... but the whole write is just splendidly done. I suppose you have taken a lot of care to get this brilliant images, no, you just didnt describe what you saw and felt - you felt peace, just what makes a sanctuary, peace. wonderful!!!
Love and light,
Lencio
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